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Baal's Domain

 

 

Evil lurks in the brumous night,

causing great pain and endless fright. 

Enkindled tongues spew hateful lies,

content to hear their victim's cries.

 

No soul is free from hell's attack,

each one a prey, it is a fact.

Running won't do a bit of good,

I press this truth be understood.

 

Though beauty shines, it's light is dull,

and wickedness reveals death's skull.

Man's deepest sin the cause of pain,

choosing to enter Baal's domain.

 

Upon the mind the liar feeds,

it's where he births his dirty deeds.

Falling into the traps he sets,

will be the grounds for deep regrets.

 

From nightmares one may spring awake,

but to their bones in fear they'll quake.

Until the Light is welcomed in,

among the dead they'll live in sin.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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artwork by Kristina Gehrmann

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  • Frogzter gold member
    July 21
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    Congrats... you truly deserved this award. I am always impressed by your writes!

    Blessings,

    Frogz


  • ShelleyA gold member
    July 21
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    Good title. Very good write and interpretation of the picture prompt. You capture the eerieness of evil. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Good meter. Vivid descriptives. Lovely depth of feeling. You paint a picture of spirit of evil dark and eerie. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.

  • Frogzter gold member
    July 9

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    Oh Pam, this is brilliant and perfect for the pic! The rhyme and flow perfect, but the message an eerie inescapable truth!

    Blessings,

    Frogz~


  • queenie gold member
    July 3

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    i like the spirituality you have implanted in your words. it's just great how you bring everything back to your roots of being a messenger for the Father. the rhymes in this are very well together and they make the reading of this a smooth flow. the girl in this picture is a true beauty. my best to you in the contest.

  • Oh I do love this! You have done a brilliant poem on this picture Excellent! Wonderful rhyme and flow
    Best wishes in the contest.
    Gaylene

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