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Milk Carton Blues

Missing image
If I only knew where..
Maybe I could learn their language
But I can't even decide
which is worse;
the beatings or
the new dresses.

A contest entry

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  • sunoir
    June 26
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    This is so sad gets out the kleenex.


  • hopergroper gold member
    June 25
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    Ahh. Ty. Yes, this poem title was a bit of a sleight of hand and a misdirection but I think it was needed to really help tie the poem together at the end...kind of cheats the word restriction a bit too.


  • KyleBerg gold member
    June 25

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    Loved the originality of the title.
    And was completely unprepared for the sadness in this piece due to the light-heartedness of it.
    Well done, thank you for entering

  • deop gold member
    June 21
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    strangely sad

    I'm reflecting on my neighbor and her fields.