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Origami.

dear aanika;

here is what i think i know about you:

i think you live in canada.  i don't know why i know this.  subconsciously, something of the maple leaf or frostbitten sunshine must have seeped into my awareness.  maybe your poetry screams canada, cries canada, says in a voice that isn't quite yours, "i need more beauty than this and not even your long-lost french eyes are enough anymore."  then again, maybe it's only my own memories, creeping across the floor to crawl into bed with me.  i went to canada once.

i think you are anemic.  medically, it's inconvenient.  spiritually, it's tragic.  in love, it's the norm.  he wasn't really there in the first place, but when he left he took all of me.  i am anemic, too. 

i think you belong to someone who fixes other peoples' hearts.  i think you wonder why he can't fix yours.  it's because it isn't his to unbreak.  i think you know this.

i think you've lost your moon, your sun, your north pole, whoever it was who was supposed to be there when the laugh lines showed on your face and your paper wings blossomed into real ones.  they don't come back once they've gone, not really, but the lines are still being drawn, and there's always icarus at the bottom.  he'll be sweet and tell you he didn't fall, only evolved.  he is folk lore.  you will be a masterpiece.

i think you are origami and acid rain.  i think you are a set of empty hands in a blue painting.  i think you are spring in december and a beautiful voice shattering on a ballroom floor.  i think you are a train wreck and all of the survivors and i think one day you'll find that everything you ever needed was right there beside you, smiling with teeth like varnished pearls in the silence of the broken 20's. 

here is what i hope for you:

i hope when you are whole again, you are just as beautiful as you are broken.


Cassandra Gemini

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  • autarky
    June 25

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    whoa whoa whoa.

    this reads like you, but the lack of capitalization i've now pinned to your writing changes everything. it changes your style in a way i am going to have to get used to. to be honest, i feel like no caps is a horrible trend everyone should drop now, because only cummings really mastered it, created it, and only cummings should be allowed to use it. but i adore it too much.

    i don't know why i'm making such a big deal out of something so small, because regardless of your now improper english, i can still hear you speaking this. and it's fantastic.

    i miss you. i guess i'll see you soon, but the wait was hard, eh?


    • Cassandra Gemini
      June 26
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      The wait certainly is hard. And I know, I felt way uncomfortable with the lack of capitalization here as well, but sometimes when I enter this particular person's contests there's some rule about not capitalizing something, so I went ahead and assumed it might apply to this contest as well. Don't worry, dearie, this isn't permanent.

      Want to know something funny? The 'train wreck' part came from your beau. He said my face looked like a train wreck, or something to that effect, and I found it so poetic that I had to stick it in somewhere.


      • autarky
        June 26
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        haha, rachel told me about the train wreck ordeal.

        i like your writing either way, caps or no.
        honest.


  • aanika
    June 21

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    i LOVE how you incorporated things you know about me into your letter. it made it so much stronger.

    the ending is fucking gorgeous. it almost made me cry. you're so sweet it's ridiculous.

    thank you so much for entering, love. <3


  • tuesdae
    June 21

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    way to totally beat my poem by a landslide.

    i loved this. i didn't even realize why i was so intrigued while reading it, but i definitely know that I wish i wrote like this.

  • NothingButShrooms
    June 21

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    this is absolutely gorgeous!
    it seems you can know quite a bit about someone without knowing anything at all...
    i think my favorite paragraph was the one about the laugh lines,
    " whoever it was who was supposed to be there when the laugh lines showed on your face and your paper wings blossomed into real ones. they don't come back once they've gone, not really, but the lines are still being drawn,"
    --with a bit of internal rhyme, eh?
    your images are described so vividly.
    i love this.
    and good luck.


    • Cassandra Gemini
      June 21
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      actually, I totally didn't even notice the rhyme! thanks for pointing that out, haha. and thank you for the comment.

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