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from the depths I rise
beckoning you with a glance
calling you closer
whispering your name
as you take me in your arms
embracing my soul
I am as you are
forever one for all time
I am all you see
your eyes echo love
moonlight illuminating
secrets come alive
you hold some at bay
keeping precious ones from me
disappointment shows
so bitter and sweet
tempting as you seemed to be
you were just a dream
I push you away
you never shall again hear
my soft siren's call
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Author notes
just something i whipped up tonight
Written March 19th, 2004
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one of a kind
This is really cool. I have never read a poem about Sirens. But there is a book, called Sirena, which is about this siren who is cursed to be mortal unless she gets a mortal man to fall in love with her. While her sisters try to.....oops this comment box isn't on describing books. Its for commenting on fabulous poems like this. Loved the imagry and the sincerity in this poem. This sets my standard for siren poetry. Just a question, what culture do sirens come from? If you know could you tell me?
Thanks, keep up the fabulous work.
-Lillian
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wonderfully written
love the background, I love both dolphins and sirens, not always in that order *S* Poem illistrates bittersweet dreams drawnup from the depths of out souls, I still believe love ignited and savored then lost is better than the alternative, Love and Light, Flowing Waters -
*sigh* I guess the thought of a Siren singing to me, would be like a bug to a light.. you know.. the ones that zap and kill them. I know, I'm weird. But Sirens from mythology just remind me of a beautiful woman singing. I dont know if anyone here listens to like Opera.. or uhm.. Celtic type music, but that's what I think about. Hmmm.. and the background is beautiful. My bedroom is nothing but dolphins in it. All in all this poem was awesome. Well written.
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This is beautiful, I'm definitely bookmarking this. Nice job and wonderful imagery.
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wow this is very kool! it almost seems as if the siren fell for the victim of her call... and rejected him for his secrets, yet left him unharmed. there almost seems to be a harbored love still thriving from within the siren that brings her not to hurt him. very kool write!!!
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Interesting idea at the end, of siren rejecting man for holding something back. Is it safe to assume this more than fantasy, it's about relationships in general. When one person gives everything to a relationship and the other holds back, the first feels betrayed and hurt, and usually push you away for it. Using a siren is a good image though, gives double meaning to the poem, a literal and a figurative.
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wow...super super cool...you really.......captured (i guess) what a siren would be like. Good job
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ah! i have a love/hate relationship with sirens (as seen by my sn)
this poem is awesome! i love it! gotta love to hate them sirens... -
I love this one, this is very good. Makes you really think huh? Again good poem.
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heyyyyy i never saw this one!!! this is excellent!!! i kinda like the twist at the end, usually the siren's call gets you in trouble cuz it turns out to be a hoax, looks like the siren gets hoaxed!
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very good
Hi from Richmond,
Very well done. I quite enjoyed this poem. Your character has so much to give but only if the relationship is equal and open.
Thanks,
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Whipped up a little more than haiku, sweetheart...hehehe. This was warm and sensuous. Not standard haiku (purists say "nature"), but, I think it is an acceptable deviation... I like this very much.
Scott
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excellent
Lovely background. A well written piece, concice and well worded. Lots of emotion too, a kind of poignant bitterness for the los of what might have been. Simple and exquisite, I loved it. Excellent -
I love it, very good, the thought behind it was great.I love to think that there are sirends and mermaids out there in that big ocean just watching what we do in their home.Great write.
Brooke
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