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When We Hurt Someone we Love*

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Sometimes we need to say we're sorry,

For the hurtful things we've done.

We need to ask for forgiveness

Being thankful for their love.

 

Sometimes we should be humble enough,

When we cause those we love some pain.

Indeed we should hang our heads,

and confess we're are ashamed.

 

we should always search our own hearts,

and confess our wayward faults.

showing our true honesty,

When the lesson has been taught.

 

Sometimes it takes amazing courage,

To admit to a friend we're wrong.

It's worse when we fail to say we're sorry,

Causing them to feel they don't belong.

 

We should set aside some time

To show a friend how much we care.

Displaying that we love them,

With a heart felt bond and flow of joyful tears.

 

Take not this poem for granted,

When your sorry admit the pain you caused.

Reaching out in love and forgiveness,

As they look beyond your human flaw's.

 

 


 

 

 

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 16
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    Gentle nudgings throughouot this piece ...The Holy Spirit is always a gentleman I have heard...and His Spirit speaks powerfully here...To walk in blessing is to forgive as we are forgiven...Bravo for the write!


  • mea-masako
    November 12
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    love it!!! amazing , beautifully written and really captures my heart...


  • Iron Saint
    October 29
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    Very Heartfelt

    I like it for its truth and humility. We all need to look not on our own things but on the things of others. Love James


  • windsong721
    October 28

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    Powerful wisdom!

    I love this piece for it's great message to the world in any language love is still love and I really like the uniqueness in your choice of rhyming words! Definately a prize winner and a proverb!!thank you so much for sharing this amazing piece


  • Snowtiger
    October 27
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    This is beautiful and touching-- if only we could all learn the subtle art of making amends. nicely done.


  • grampabob1946 silver member
    October 22

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    Wonderful Writing!!!

    I told a coworker today that I was sorry for causing her extra work. I really had no idea I had created a problem for her. It was very freeing. I will be careful not to create this problem again.


  • SilentStance
    October 22

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    Love this!

    My dear, what an amazing work. Reading this is a blow to the heart, a lession to all. It's odd, I feel over-whelmed yet am lost for words, all I can say is "I love this"


  • GothicFyre
    October 1

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    Beautiful, for a poem that basically says God is the dog's backside it was beautiful and emotional and amazing. Please don't use "praise the lord" at the end, it ruins the whole tone of it.


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    September 7

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    but sometime, they really go away
    and they do not ome back
    we cry every night, we plea and we pray
    but they really don't come..
    so painful na.
    great write
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • darlee77 gold member
    September 4
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    This is so true. It never hurts to say I'm sorry. Very wise and inspiring. God bless.


  • AbundantBetrayals
    September 4

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    The worst thing is asking forgiveness from people you love in the fear that they may not forgive you. Your words flowed together wonderfully and your message was worded beautifully. Forgiving someone is difficult but asking for that forgiveness, overcoming that fear of unforgiving loved ones, is something that each heart has had to do. Those trials have given us the ability to forgive since others have forgiven us.
    Well done poet.
    ~Betrayals

  • i dont think theres anything harder than asking for forgiveness, except maybe the act of forgiving...but sorry is such an everyday word now, that its lost most of the meaning, and so when you try to say it and mean it, it gets stuck and you cant

  • Nice one !!
    i was so absorbed by it that i cudnt stop myself from remembering my past, which flows the same way this poem flows.....
    Very interesting and encouraging !!
    Keep on writing like thiese !!

  • Mykael
    July 19
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    I find forgiving very hard. this is very encouraging,
    I like it.

  • beautiful.thank yo


  • xXMe17xX
    July 18
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    i thought this was toching


  • Kiryulover
    July 18

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    Try adding a bit more spacing. It just looks like a paragraph...

    Otherwise, it was beautiful and the backround was cute. <3

  • seay49 gold member
    June 23
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    getting better!

    here are the first two stanzas:

    Sometimes we need to say we're sorry,
    For the hurtful things we've done.
    We need to ask for forgiveness,
    Being thankful for their love.

    Sometimes we should be humble enough,
    When we cause those we love some pain.
    Indeed we should just hang our heads,
    And confess we are ashamed.

    heres how I might change the second 2 stanzas:

    We should always look into our hearts,
    And confess our wayward faults.
    Showing our true honesty,
    When the lesson has been taught.

    Sometimes it takes amazing courage,
    To admit to a friend we're wrong.
    It's worse when we fail to say we're sorry,
    Causing them to feel they don't belong.

    I would break it up into stanzas. let me know what you think. I really like it! -jeff

  • seay49 gold member
    June 22

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    can use some work

    first of all, i really like the ideas and words of this poem! i think you might want to structure this poem and use punctuation, Here is how i might change it a little:

    Sometimes we need to say we're sorry,
    For the hurtful things we've done.
    We need to ask for forgiveness,
    Being thankful for their love.

    Sometimes we should be humble enough,
    When we cause those we love some pain.
    Indeed we should just hang our heads,
    And confess we are ashamed.

    this is just an example of giving the poem a little more structure, hope this helps. -jeff


    • Sharon Marie gold member
      June 23
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      Thanks for your help

      Can you look back on my poem I tryed and did change it like you said plese look at it. I would greatly appreciate it just be honest again ,Please Look!
      blessing's
      Sharon

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