I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As there is nothing
Better than it to do,
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As it helps me forget,
What I have gone through!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
Because I feel,
It best suits my face!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As it leaves behind,
No unsought trace!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As others too,
Think it is true!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
Because when I do,
It seems to accrue!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I wish to show,
I am not frail
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I wish to grow,
Even if I fail!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I wish one day,
It will be true and honest
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As mourning on what’s past
I absolutely detest!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I sincerely believe,
In me and my God!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I expect nothing,
From the Lord!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
So God will at least,
Have one less griever!
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
So that others too
Will smile forever
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
I have vowed to smile at my fate…
Author notes
Smile is a small curve that can make many things straight...
and it costs us nothing!!!
So, keep smiling and you will make others smile too, as its contagious
This is the prompt that took me to the above thought...
7. What can I do to make a better world?
I nominate - Spirit's Refrain.
In a list
A contest entry
- Telos - positive poetry - 3000pts up for grabs+ honorable mentions by Isi.
3000 points, ended June 29, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
ALL CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM IS WELCOME!
Comments
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As there is nothing
Better than it to do,
^ very awkward wording. I'm thinking you could reword it. Such as
As there is nothing
Better than such to do
it's a little bit better at least
I really really love the second stanza, especially towards the ending
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As it leaves behind,
No unsought trace!
you've got such a great attitude towards life and it really shines through in this piece.
Because when I do,
It seems to accrue!
Wow that really impressed me because with my vast vocabulary, I don't know what that means XD
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I wish to show,
I am not frail
I have vowed to smile at my fate,
As I wish to grow,
Even if I fail!
EXCELLENT wording!
I love how you gave credit to God also
and your repetition at the end really brought it all home.
I have vowed to smile at my fate
I have vowed to smile at my fate...
well said. great write
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thank you my dear friend...I am happy you found it good!
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At this your readers smile at you!
(:
Love,
Amera♥
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really nice message and loved the rhyming, but the flow is uneven I think. Anyway awesome poem over all, thanks for sharing!
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I like the message in this poem very much, smile - because it suits my face: I loved that line. I love the idea of keeping the focus on what's positive first. The flow is a little uneven sometimes, I think the rhymes are more in the way of the poem than they are helping it convey the meaning of it. I like the repetitions
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Thank you for the comment! It means a lot to me! Thanks again!
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Good work, and I like your outlook. Take care and Have fun. Steve
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thanks for the comment. I am happy you liked my work!
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I love it! You really put great emotions and details into this write. Now I will try my best to smile, so others will too. Amazing job, keep on writing!!!
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Aww! I love this!
I was smiling throughout the entire thing! It's great Good job to you! This piece is worthy of publication.. definitely!! Great job Pranj!!
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