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Here Comes Goodbye

the rain falls softly hitting the ground
as i cry my tears of pain
losing you was the worst thing
that could ever happen to me

i look out the window
to that long dirt road
waiting to hear your car pull up
but it never comes

here comes good bye
here comes the last time
here comes the start
of every sleepless night
the first of every tear i'm gonna cry
here comes good bye

i never thought that
i would ever lose you
to a world that can be so cruel
the tears fall as the pain comes

walking down the long dirt road
i travel back in time
remembering every memory
of just the two of us

here comes good bye
here comes the last time
here comes the start
of every sleepless night
the first of every tear i'm gonna cry
here comes good bye

i stand at your grave
looking down at you
trying hard not to let my colors show
in front of the ones you love

i bite my lip and close my eyes
wishing the pain to go away
then i drop down to my knees
and cry my good bye

here comes good bye
here comes the last time
here comes the start
of every sleepless night
the first of every tear i'm gonna cry
here comes good bye

Author notes

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1Uq3nI11w4g

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  • LylaEmoriaCullen
    October 26

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    Sis

    this is really good but I think you need to revise it because it seems to similar to the song


  • Shades of Pale silver member
    September 8

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    I've heard the song a lot... you stole A LOT. I think this peice needs some work, it's okay to take the genreal idea but taking lines is well, dare I say it, theft.

    Other than that the peice was overall good.