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You Are the Sky

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A choice to dance comes to those,
the last to remain as
warm winds caress the border.

Waves roll in and roll away again.
The sea smuggles her pearls,
hiding them from tourists.

You are the sky,
you are the voice.
You dance on purpose,
you have a choice.

No one has to stay as
the island light retreats.
Steel drums play along
with the rhythm of the rain.

The moon torches the sea
illuminating the world.
Everyone in Africa
stands up to dance.

You are the sky,
you are the voice.
You dance on purpose,
you have a choice.






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  • lettersfromthelost
    August 9

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    Yet another gorgeous piece. I can see the silvered shores, the sun coming up... I think that poetry is beauty and human thought distilled into pure essence, and I think that you capture it amazingly well! I do wonder what was on your mind when you wrote this, though, I must admit.
    Five stars for effort!


    • redbarchettadrive gold member
      August 9
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      Thanks Connie! I don't really recall what was coursing through my mind at that time. It sounds like I used some classic rock to write that. Al Stewart: On the Border, Year of the Cat...


  • orangepeeling
    July 23

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    great flow , I loveed this poem

    You are the sky,
    you are the voice.
    You dance on purpose,
    you have a choice

    best lines : )
    keep penning
    - Lani


  • AugustInSeptember
    July 22

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    Pray tell, what was the subject matter? I would say I was intrigued if I knew how to spell it.

    It is very well written, though I can't make much more of it than that.


  • Mango Memories
    July 22
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    I could see all this play out!

    I love it.

    Well done finalist!


  • Coathanger
    July 11
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    This has such an easy flow that allows you time to digest each line.


  • The Blue Lamp Post silver member
    June 27

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    Sets a mood that can not be denied...
    I found it inviting in its format with the
    echoed phrasing of "you are". Lovely voice.
    Blue


  • doyouloveit
    June 22

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    what a wonderful piece of work here Mark I love what you had to say about whoever is YOU your choice of words was quite beautiful and they fell so well together a great read indeed love it

  • ecrivain01
    June 21

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    Perfectly gorgeous background ...

    but it's just a bit too bright, and the poem was difficult to read.

    However, I liked the poem, even if my eyes suffered a bit in the reading.

    Did you make this background? It's really fabulous.

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