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Ode to His Ways

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Hand trailing along my sleeping form,

he wakes me with steaming brew

and a luscious ode to my hips,

eyes lustered with promises for the day.

 

His words undulate around my rising breath,

sneaking beneath rumpled covers to rouse

my drowsy ankles,

my yawning toes.

 

The fragrance of his misted song

is a lovestruck honeyed haven,

sticky-sweet upon my tongue

as my smile trembles under quiescent sounds.

 

His tender curvings of rapturous dance

lift me from this dark velvet pillow into dream.

 

Sunrise simmers beneath his brow,

his skylit glance shimmering

across my golden landscape.

 

He lingers within my shadows

and yearns beneath my light

for warmth

 

of slow silences between us

upon this hearth, swaying softly...
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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Art: "Embrace Words" by lauriethompson30 from photobucket
 
Written for my husband of 6 months...
 
I ain't kiddin'...he started it.  
 

“Ode to Her Hips”


by Danny Beatty 

 

 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

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  • who iam
    October 26

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    The warmth surrounds the vivid imagery of your love for this person.Written with a passion and sensitivity that jumps off the pages as your beautiful picture indicates.


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 16

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    gorgeous imagery beautifullywritten

    God bless you my friend...


  • Danny Beatty gold member
    June 22

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    'roused' yer ankels and all that did I? well, lessee here, darlin' thing, there you were cloaked in the sun through the window and all, and a bird or two swooped at the window like little troublemakers, and oh they had an attitude what with the unsuspecting red hawk about one hundred yards out cruisin for a bruisin ... heh .. and, ,,, anyhows, i'd worked up this piece thinking about your curves and such and thought it would be a clever way to wake you up by reading it to you before your coffee ( which I made again, as is my wont ) since you make sissy coffe, ya know, ... women!

    the poem is ... well I agree with all the commentors, except the one about the font being too small ...


    my best comment too summarize my assessment of this gem is that it is now on my 'power poetry' list, and, as I just told individuality, as regards one of his I just read and put it in the same list "it is a short list, i am very picky, it shall remain a short list' ... if it weren't for you it would be even a lot shorter


    • Night Hope gold member
      June 22
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      If it is such "sissy coffee", then why are ya in there slurpin' it up like it's manna from heaven, pray tell??? I'll have you know, Mister, that my mother, who was a professional cook, mind you, said I made the BESTEST coffee. That ain't no slouch of a compliment, ya know.
      I had already enlarged the font before ya got here, Sweetheart. It was kinda small, I s'pose. As for your poemy thing to me... I already spoke with you about it. Thoroughly. I love you, Danny.


  • csmmoms2
    June 22

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    Great art and worded arms...hand trailing along
    You've captured something very special here dear young poet. -c


  • SabaSophiya
    June 21
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    BEAUTIFUL


  • sahdana
    June 21

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    word junky I am here!!!!

    I confess...I'm a word junky and this poems feeds my hunger!!!! Wonderful images and fantastic presentation here....drowsy ankles and yearning toes...now THOSE images and feelings make this whole piece come alive...grrrreat piece of work here! Thanxxx for my fix!!! All the best!

  • a good poem ah we all like a nice brew in the morning, it revives us from sleep

    what i would say here on presentation is perhaps think of making the font a little larger? even with my glasses on i had to put my nose to my screen then to read your words, why mkae it hard for your fans


    • Night Hope gold member
      June 21
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      Hell's Bells, Ian. You really DO need glasses. New ones, apparently. Wanna borrow my trifocals??? I've worn glasses since I was 8...I'm legally blind. I could still see it. Nonetheless, I did enlarge the font. Perhaps it's because we all stay online so damned long & the lines are beginning to blur. Thanks, Sweetie.

  • I absolutely love that, it is amazing, so many feelings expressed in words, keep working that amazing gift

  • This is beautiful

    I especially liked:

    "His words undulate around my rising breath,
    sneaking beneath rumpled covers to rouse
    my drowsy ankles,
    my yawning toes"


  • Lovely write..the imagery is so relaxed and calm. Pleasure to read

  • A cup of black coffee and the first cigarette/cough of the day doesn't really compare.

    *sighs as usual and wanders away*

    Beautiful.



    • Night Hope gold member
      June 20
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      Tell me about it, Sweetie. I did the coffee/smoke routine for 50 years before Danny came along. Let alone the sighing...Sighhh.

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