As I count the dew drops
on this spiders web.
I think of the other world we
care not about.
A world of insects,
plants and gas,
where Mother nature's first beauty was made.
Inside this grassy bio-sphere,
life goes on, with no complexity.
There are no lovers,uncles or step-brothers.
It just keeps the Earth turning,the flowers
pollinating and the seasons changing.
Thier lifes' laid out, their uniqueness un-questionable.
The never ceasing variety of colours
from vibrant glossy red to suckulent green.
Changing when the time is right.
This somewhat nano place will live on,
growing,blosoming and inspiring
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pity there are quite some spelling mistakes, seeing AP has a spelling checker quite unnecessary, it takes my focus away from the message of your write, bugs will always survive as we humans most certainly wont, thank you for entering
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That was pretty.. I think. I'm not too much a fan for a green earth. I'm the one who says.. bring on global warming!
Thanks for entering.
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'As I count the dew drops
on this spiders web.
I think of the other world we
care not about.'
wonderful imagery.
thanks for entering
good luck -
Thier lifes' laid out, their uniqueness un-questionable.
The never ceasing variety of colours
from vibrant glossy red to suckulent green.
Changing when the time is right.
This somewhat nano place will live on,
growing,blosoming and inspiring <--- billiant part.
This poem is amazing and i really loved it. Brilliant!
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grassy bio-sphere, and their uniqueness un-questionable = fave
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It is a little confusing I'm not certain about it, it's ok but ZI'm not certain I'll see what happens...
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complex, difficult to follow
would but smell as sweet by any other name, my bimbet blue moon. X -
loved this piece!
it was really good! WOW! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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See i really loved this cus several reasons
1. Its something ive thought about and never put into words, which you have, brilliantly
2. The starting imagery, i love dew on a spiders web, its so beautiful
and 3. The simplicity of the theme, its true they have no worries no hate no love just they keep things running
great write
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