Do you hear what they say bout us?
(not the preverbeil us but all around us and in us)
What drives them to mistrust?
(espically when theyconfuse love for lust)
As a species are we really such a bust?
(espically when we spend are whole life to try)
Do you see what they write about us?
(the disgust of a land grown to roboust)
Do you think its true about us?
(i do but labeled the fool for what a see)
Do you see the beatiful world made for us?
(my eyes must fail me beacause beauty is the word not)
Do you see the the path laid before us
(more of the same a constent struggle that ends mudane)
Do you see what god made for us?
(to die in obcsureity without a word to say)
Do you feel the way they care?
(when its a piroity not to make sure you fair)
do you see the beautiful world we live in?
(for you)
not me.....
fix my spelling!! please and any major grammer issues to
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An interesting poem.
Spelling and grammar you may want to fix:
(not the preverbeil us but all around us and in us)
---> preverbeil? I am not entirely sure what word you are meaning there.
(espically when theyconfuse love for lust)
---> especially; they confuse
(espically when we spend are whole life to try)
---> especially
(the disgust of a land grown to roboust)
---> robust
Do you think its true about us?
---> it's
Do you see the beatiful world made for us?
---> beautiful
(my eyes must fail me beacause beauty is the word not)
---> because
Do you see the the path laid before us
(more of the same a constent struggle that ends mudane)
---> constant, mundane
Do you see what god made for us?
---> God
(to die in obcsureity without a word to say)
---> obscurity
(when its a piroity not to make sure you fair)
---> it's; priority
> sinnocence
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