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Vacant Days



June 20, 1796

Dear Lady,
We passed on the avenue today…
it was late afternoon,
you were dressed in evening promises,
and I, in hopeful pursuit;
oh, how you caught me off my guard…

Your eyes trailed,
you smiled demure, do you remember?
I missed my chance as we passed,
for you sent me reeling into a dream…

I asked my companions,
and they saw everything,
(and they will torment me to no end)
but they did know of you,
and this is how my letter has found you…

I don’t know if you give your eyes so freely
to every man you pass,
if so, I would not fault you,
such a prize is such a decent man’s due,
and it is yours to give…

but if, beyond my furthest hope,
your eyes were for me alone,
then alone you may have me…
I would dearly like to meet you,
my carriage will await at your gate at 9:30,
it is yours to take at your will…
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So I have written her,
opened my heart to her
though I thought it lost,
yet here reawakened by a glance;
and I, offering it so freely
to a mere apparition
with little chance of return…
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I hear my carriage now, a hollow sound of late,
over the broad cobblestones;
a lonely sound, cruelly reflecting these vacant days…

I have grown accustomed to them,
perhaps it is my fate…
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Sir! Sir!
What is it, Alfred?
A lady awaits…
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emmyb

"Vacant Days Theme" - from "Thinking of August" by our very own Random Goldfish (mod 23 by me) and who is romantically thinking of August...

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  • Purrsanthema
    August 23
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    Congratulations on the trophy! I love the delicacy of line 4 especially, and, of course, the conclusion.


  • Edie gold member
    July 9

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    I really liked this one, especially the end...but thats because I simply like happy endings!

    Very well done.


    • wbiro gold member
      July 9
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      yes, happy endings that last forever... and I'm glad you saw this as a happy ending... (for there is much left open...! )

  • excellent end to this poem! No wonder Laney likes it. Well done!


    • wbiro gold member
      July 7
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      Laney likes it? Well! (yes, I knew that)... but how it measures up to the other quality entries, that is the question... I like to think of them all as 'different spices'... which one 'wins' is a matter of that moment's taste in the judge...
      but then, I've won much more already, for Lane brings out a more mature writer in me, which I like... so I hope no one minds if I'm a bit selfish with her for a while... and if I'm actually doing that, I promise to release her soon...

  • Rowan gold member
    July 6
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    What a wonderful write this is! Loved it.


  • Emmyb gold member
    June 24

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    ooh thank you
    i will look out for you next time you pass my way

    great poem

    Emmyb.

    • wbiro gold member
      June 24
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      you welcome (I think it was that 18th century look in your expression...!)


  • Cannonsfire
    June 24
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    Beautifully spun tale of sensual passion here C

  • Ohh... I loved this!! So romantic and old wordly... just gorgeous!

    • wbiro gold member
      June 23
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      thanks much, nothing like historical romance...!

  • this is simply lovely!! i felt i was thrown back in time! beautiful!

    Blessings

    Rend


  • condor gold member
    June 20

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    Well, this spoke so much of a man who was forever hopeful of something that he he would never have, and yet, he did not have faith in the eyes that had beheld him. One gave in too soon to their own way of thinking, and what happened...Sir Sir! A lady awaits. Beautiful ending that really set this poem off. well done indeed. I wish you the very best in the contest.

    • wbiro gold member
      June 20
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      thanks... and those passing eyes, a story in each...

  • Aries gold member
    June 20
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    Wonderful

    I love this great write,good luck in the contest

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