When I had no one else,
As if fate
There you were
Did I knock on God's door?
For him to do such a deed
I doubt I deserve
Him sending you
here with me
Knowing you're leaving,
makes it even harder to sleep
Knowing now I'll be nothing more,
than a faded memory
However,
It gets some what easier to cope
Knowing that [in you] somewhere inside
A chunk of my heart will forever reside.
Please tell me what you think
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awwww..that was a nice one =)
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This is amaziong and such a great piece. I really loved it.
I loved these lines: Knowing that [in you] somewhere inside
A chunk of my heart will forever reside.
A really beautiful yet sad piece. Amazing! -
Your words are used with great power, the disappointent shows through, God has provided this mentor only to snatch him back, yet he has left his indelible presents in your heart. What a beautiful gift.
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This was a gently sorrow peice. it was grasiously explained of your emotions and it was ironic i am listneing to "there SHE goes" lovely write froggy
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Now for my real comment. I like the way its formatted visually, growing and shrinking to fit the mood. The message is strong, and simply hope the time comes for better days.
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i liked it...especially since i am at this kind of crossroads in my life at this time...it hurts so much...i like it...i don't know if it's finished or not but it's good just the way it is....keep on writing..it's good for you!
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I like where your going.
But my only complaint is that for me it was hard to read I think if you put this in stanza's it would benefit the flow of the poem.
I did the messege you are trying to send in this poem, I can relate in this point in time in my life.
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