As I look in the mirror
I notice the true me
a person no one loves
a person no one sees
I decided to change that
to make people aware
a total makeover
without at all one scare
people needed to notice
so I needed to look real good
I couldn't have gone punk
I couldn't have at all gone hood
I could have been scene
I could've probably pulled off Goth
but it would've had to have been quick
I was moving like a sloth
when I was finally finished
I didn't look in the mirror to see
the new, I'm proved and noticeable
person staring back at me
after a few weeks of acting
I realized what I was doing to myself
I was losing my fat and weight
I was also losing my health
when I finally did look back in the mirror
I seen what everyone else saw
an anorexic preppy person
with one to many flaws
What did you think
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great job, especially the last stanza, keep it up
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Hey I liked this
Nicely worded and with genuine feeling in it. That counts more then structure and form. I think you need to understand one thing most people dont understand until late in life.... we are our own worse critics. Ease up on yourself. I saw your website and your a doll. Keep a smile on because your prettier then 90% of the female population. Later Gater!
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wow.
thanks for being brave enough to write about this.
you are clever. your pic is nice, you have a happy smile..
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im speechless. this was amzing
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your too harsh on yourself but i do understand how we all see ourselves differnt than others see us . the poem is great bold brave honest and real good image of your perception .. you know you better than anyone but i see beauty and a wonderfull pen . cheers peace and love glenn
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Wow! You are very brave and very honest! This is a well written piece! You can never please everyone, so you might as well please yourself!
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