Dearest Aanika,
all I know of you
eyes and smile
words of youth, pain only too real
hope and tears fill your pockets.
From the other side of life,
aging, failing,
I send you a dove with worn wings,
heart full of wonders,
an adept of sorrow
trailing laughter, gentle feathers.
Greetings I bring you from that which
you cannot know,
tree-lined valleys you will never see,
oceans not made for you.
Yet they color you blue green gold
with impatience
feet flying too fast for shadows
brown earth barley touched.
May the suns you create shine always.
My heart wills you peace.
Beth
Author notes
g r a m m a b u f f
A contest entry
- write me a letter, yeah. by aanika.
1998 points, ended July 5, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please Crtique - I intend to revise this.
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Well written letter ...so much expression in this work of yours. The last line I lked the most. THANKS again!
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Thanks, Pat. Good to see you around again. Take care.
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this letter is lovely...
i was so moved by the line "aging, failing," in particular - and i don't even know why exactly. it just seemed so powerful yet peaceful.
some nice renderings in this. and i liked the symbolism of the dove. - Mary Jo
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thank you so much for this touching letter.
it means a lot to me that i have actually touched the lives of people on this site. every day i discover new brilliant poets and i'd just like to say thank you for your kind words. things like this really make me feel that my poetry is worthwhile.
you are a beautiful person.
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The use of feathers within this piece is such a wise & tender trimming, Poet. Especially the worn feathers of a dove, the symbol of peace & ultimately, of love. Good luck in the contest. 
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