Quiver whiskers, nose alert
Burrow long and dark.
Two large eyes, peer out,
Not missing those that lurk,
Amongst the shadows cloak.
Echoes of a thousand screams,
Ancestral ears provoke.
Radar with journey takes,
Ventures, into moonlight,
Uncalculated stakes.
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Love the images in this.
About the only thing I could critique would be the over-use, in my opinion, of caps - threw the flow off a bit for me. Other than that, I enjoyed this.
Nicely done.
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Great visuals!
I could see the little guy...and feel him..
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Thanks so much for entering and your continued support of our contests!
Write on!
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This is a nice piece I would of loved to seen more of it making it a bit longer but still a great write thanks for entering and supporting our contest be well.
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This is a really cool poem. Sounds like you were on a trip or something. It was very interesting. I enjoyed the read!!!
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Always enjoy your writes about animals. Have you read Watership Down? Your pieces shows the rabbit as quite an adventurous creature, not timid at all.
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Yes, I wrote a similar book, but mine was crappier.
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It's always nice to have written a whole book. I have too and there is one rabbit in it.
How about The Velveteen Rabbit? You might find that a bit too...I want to say "corny" but that's not the right word. -
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Yes, similarly my father ran off into the woods and became a real Silver Back Ape.
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Must he a hard life being a small animal, always on the lookout for a larger animal that wants to catch it. Hey wait, that sounds like my life, lol
Such cute creatures, rabbits. I want one. Will you take care of it for me, lol
There is of course a seriousness to this poem which highlights the hare's necessary qualities for survival.
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