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My All Enchanting Shore

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Oh sing to me sweet summer's song,
Oh sing of sun and sand.
Your breath so gentle on my ear
Speaks words I understand.

The high tide tenders wiggling toes,
The beach has disappeared.
The waves that pound the empty shore
Are not now to be feared.

The blue sky stretches off the earth,
There's only it and me.
And standing here I know I have
Poseidon's company.

He holds my mind within his grasp,
For in my dreams I might
Somehow rise up to join with him
And be his Amphitrite.

Oh sea-bourne mist that scents the air
And rises from the foam.
Surround me, hold me in your arms
And lead this mermaid home.

My feet move over shifting sand,
As one more wave recedes.
And as the next rolls swiftly in,
I follow where it leads.

For peace o'erwhelms my heart and soul,
My spirit surely knows
That when distressed it runs to where
The gentle sea breeze blows.

And here alone 'midst sea and air,
My special friend close by,
I close my eyes and breathe him in,
He lifts me up on high.

The surface breaks, a streak of gray,
Elation lights my face.
The dolphin winks, then disappears,
We share this special place.

And now I'm covered to my waist,
A nibble on my thigh.
I spot the nibbler through the foam
And wave a fond goodbye.

If heaven came to earth today,
Now don't misunderstand,
The place that it would surely choose
Is my deserted strand.

So water, sand, and azure sky
Surround me evermore,
I'm held to this seductive place,
My all enchanting shore. 

 


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Love the shore and the sea

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  • queenie gold member
    July 3

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    you had to be right there staring out over the water to have gotten in touch with such intimate feelings and to be so expessive about it. this is what true writing is about. your reach for your creativity is long and your grasp for the words of your soul is on point. you continue to be a favorite of mine, but so a true poet.

  • ozma
    June 30
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    Love this to the moon and back... My favorite line: If heaven came to earth today


    • kirbysman Moderators member
      June 30
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      Thanks

      Thanks so much for the comment. Also, I assume you recognized your daughter standing there in the surf.


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    June 24

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    Well. I finally get to drink in the verse that our busy Mr. Kirbyman imparts.

    This is absolutely beautiful. Detail is exact, flow is as smooth as a water's rush to shore. How delightful it is to see so much symmetry in this piece.

    I guess the ONly suggestion I would have is to eliminate the punctuation that could interrupt the nearly perfect iambs, hence. the ebb of its beauty!


    Love it.


  • Ishtar
    June 21

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    I have no comment, you probably have heard it from me and a million other people - You're amazing! Your form is flawless and you flaunt it well to us who suffer from cluttered head syndrome.

    -Reens


  • mitchybaby
    June 21

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    Holy crapalony!! This is such an enchanting poem dad, a lot of fantasy imagery in this wonderful piece. I love the alliteration at the begininng of the poem, in the first two stanzas. Alliteration has always been one of my favourites, I just can't seem to write with it myself. lol. I'm curious were you staring at the sea when you wrote this?? The imagery is so real I feel like I am actually sitting there with you while you write, a place I would really love to be right now dad. I love you more than you know!!!


  • catz Moderators member
    June 19

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    This is such a beautiful poem, Paul. It's serenity and gracefulness spread through the conciencesness with soft touches of sea and breeze.
    Ahhh... to be in such a place, to feel the essence of tranquility... this is heaven

    An exquisite poem and I wish you best in the contest

    Dee

  • BEAUTIFUL and so awesome. I felt like I was floating when I was reading it. I really love this. Too true.

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