Someone it seems has given me the choice,
Finally told me where my calling lies.
It's not a release of the pain I hide,
It's a release of the truth I've buried inside.
I can watch myself spill out like the thunder rolls in black skies,
And for just one minute I'm real like an earthquake in time.
I am an advocate for the soon to be damned,
I follow the path of the most condemned.
When I bring the knife like a jolt to my mind,
It's who I should've been that I find.
Each time a little more of the puzzles solved,
A bit more of myself becomes revealed.
So please don't take my blade, please don't take that part,
Of the little pieces of myself hidden in my heart.
Author notes
Thank you, Luke.
So.... What'd ya think?
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hey
Love it. good read. you should add me -
emotionally revealing
The heart of my heart, you tell a story that is my story. Feel the feeling of my own heart. You drew my picture like a song sang for my heart. Pear through your own soul to see that of others that hid in the same darkness.
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this sounds autobiographical or some other equally as big a word
You really have a knack for telling it like it is...thanks for sharing. peace and light, KP
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i loved the last part
those were my favorite lines
really good job -
Great job with dis one.
It's not a release of the pain I hide,
It's a release of the truth I've buried inside.
I loved those lines, spewing emotion, imagery flowing.
Someone it seems has given me the choice,
Finally told me where my calling lies.
I can relate to that kind of, just if you made it a different subject, it reminded me of something, thanks.
- DKC
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This is amazing, i like this a lot, great job, i really liked taking the time to read this, you did something great here
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"I can watch myself spill out like the thunder rolls in black skies,
And for just one minute I'm real like an earthquake in time."
Love these lines. amazing write.
thanks so much for sharing -
Nice Piece
Quite sad and quite interesting well written i will say - there is something about this poem that makes it a nice piece but i also feel like there is something else that you needed to let out which you didnt,i cant quite figure out what it could be but i am sure its just me...i like the fact that it left me deep in thought...thanks for sharing. -
This is an interesting poem. Sounds a bit depressing but I do like the way you describe your feelings. I enjoyed the read!!!
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