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~Always~

 

 

 

 

 

my foot dangling off the back porch

swing, a steady rocking in honeysuckled

breezes.

 

 

 

flickering leafy shadows cross

my face, tempers my soul to

sleep.

 

 

 

 

as I wake;

you are leaning against the railing

looking off into the distance, clad

in jeans & bare feet, your shirt opened

to the waist.

 

 

 

a smile greets me with a taste of

peaches, remembering how you trembled

for me, touched my soul to weep.

 

 

 

vivid colors of us laced together

unyielding, a lyrical song shared earlier

still on your face, reflecting nothing less

than brilliant.

 

 

 

 

your hands so lovingly speak what your

mouth does not say, on a table by the bed

a poem you’ve written on linen paper with

the edges frayed .

 

 

 

 

I’ve received many beautiful things

in my life time, diamonds fit for a queen

oh how they sparkled and shined. 

 

 

 

 

 

out of all these

experiences, nothing has stirred my heart

more than your words so lovingly penned

on a simple piece of paper

 

 

 

 

 

 

               And it reads:

 

 

 

       in all of life’s   uncertainties,

    when you are bent like a reed in

the wind, I will be the rain that covers

 you, a solid ground to place your

  foot, a loving body to nestle by

     on Sunday afternoons; my

             love, I will be here

                        for you

                     ~Always~

                            V

 

    

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  • chael
    November 10
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    Brilliant

    What can I say except tip of the hat, and well put .....chael


  • zappa gold member
    October 24
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    I will bend like a reed in the wind. nuff-said.......F awesome !!!!


  • Roland Welles gold member
    October 23

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    Wow... Wow... Wow... Brings a warm, beautiful feeling to my soul and heart just reading this... Wow... One of those that just leaves me speechless... This describes a love all true and evolved lovers yearn for... Perfect poetry!!!... Word choice, structure, the emotions described and brought forth from the reader, the images... A story, a poem, a universal "moment in time"... Loved everything, but this was my favorite: "a smile greets me with a taste of
    peaches, remembering how you trembled
    for me, touched my soul to weep."
    Thanks for sharing!!! You deserved that trophy and then some....
    Peace,
    Russell


  • laura0757 gold member
    October 20

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    this is so bieutiful. linen paper. which sounds nice, diamonds sound better still..lol...I love all that glitter's too...but your right, as the old saying rings true nothing is more priceless than love.........great real poetry and congratulations on your silver but it could have been easily a gold.............alway an enjoyment. and an inspiration..as well........this love shined through,,,,,,,,,,but the shallow part of me, liked diamonds too..............lol...............thanks for read, rend the veil............peace and love..............


  • Debra A Baugh gold member
    October 2

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    beautifully penned

    I love this it is so mellow in its rendering.....has it's own lullaby so to speak......such love displayed simply my the writing of our pens.....and the love pouring from our hearts.......well-written.....could not have said it better myself......superb write.......love peace & harmony(LP&H)


  • tashgirl
    September 24
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    veryveryvery good


  • daviscth silver member
    September 10

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    Oh wow!! This just captured my attention from the opening lines. What a wonderful poem you have created here. Congratulations on the silver win.


  • heron
    August 30

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    Hi Rend, What a tremendous way you have with words, but what mostly hit me is the feeling that hides behind the words, bravo and your compo is excellent and delicate

  • refinnej
    August 29

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    So Beautiful........reminded me of the poem my husband wrote for me asking me to marry him. To this day, and always will be my favorite gift I ever received.


  • Desire gold member
    August 11

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    Woot~

    Beautiful piece penned from the Heart
    Love how You written these words
    also shared one
    from a simple piece of paper

    This stirs the Soul~
    Bravo!
    Congratulations on Your shiny!
    -throws confetti-
    Woot~

    Thank You for sharing Your Voice
    Best wishes in all You do
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 12
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      what a greeting, full of fan fare and love,
      I feel so blessed by you, and congrats on your Trophy Too!!
      thank you for your comment and clappies, as well Love,

      Many Blessings

      Rend


  • GotLilt
    August 11
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    Lovely! congrats


  • An Old Codger gold member
    August 11

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    A very beautiful write. Congratulation on the silver.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 12
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      Thank you so much for your comment, and congradualtions on the Gold!!
      yeah! what a blessings Old Codger

      Rend


  • Xianaria gold member
    August 11

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    Congrats on the Silver, Rend! Well deserved!

    Blessings,
    ~ Tim


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    August 11

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    This is just beautiful!
    Can't add anything more to that comment for this piece just leaves me speechless
    Sigh....
    The best of luck to oyu; I LOVE this poem!!!

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      August 12
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      thank you so much for adding me to your list,
      and for coming by to read i am deeply honored,
      Blessings to you,

      Rend

  • Xianaria gold member
    August 9
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    This is beautiful, Rend
    A very heart-warming, gorgeous piece filled with hope and love.

    Always a pleasure to read your work! It looks like both of us are exploring desires of the heart.

    Blessings to you,
    ~ Tim


  • Rick Weston silver member
    July 25

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    lifts my soul just reading this. the imagery capturing the mood and moment combined with the heartfelt sentiment. wonderful is love ebbing in and out or resting a while.

    thanks for sharing.

  • THE BEAUTIFULLY WOVWN WORDS IN THIS MADE MY SOUL SING
    ITS COMPLETELY EXCELLENT, DELICATE AND PRECIOUS LIKE ANTIQUE LACE

    THANKYOU SO VERY MUCH
    T


  • jackreed3 gold member
    July 10
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    I think you should marry him JackReed3...


  • Garmond gold member
    July 3

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    Mmmmmm, such a frangrant breeze this write rides upon. This is utter poetry.... words from pure emotion soaked thought and sentiment.
    You make me want to pick up my guitar


  • awannabepoet
    June 30

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    The world knows little of this love for todays and tommorows are so easily counfounded into a single and more demanding present day.

    Love, oh how I love thee on sunday afternoons after a warm summer rain, let me hold you close to my heart that you may feel me beat.

    Love, oh how I miss thee on sunday afternoons for what is today if I cannot hold you near, the empty spaces you used to fill, you have foresaken me and my heart only knows to weep.

    Love, oh love that my days might end, for in them there is much of what we call sorrow, for a life lived and love that was never given a simple gift retained for the ages.

    Love let the lovers sing your praises, I wish for thee no more, let me rest in saddened creek where the willows weep a solmen melancholy song.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • Oh my this is just gorgeous and your imagery is outstanding. Sure takes the reader into the moment and leaves a wonderful feeling! Great work!

    Linda

  • flickering leafy shadows cross my face - yeah i have that at times with the hopeless shadow that leans towards one more tomorrrow.

  • this was a very endearing and touching piece. love, love, love it.


  • LiMarie silver member
    June 26
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    So sweet and deeply touching..Beautiful

  • awesome


  • Swan song gold member
    June 26
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    Rend this is nothing short of pure awesomeness!!!!
    wow this was really beautiful!!!!!

  • zenben1126
    June 25

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    Hmmm

    I dont fully know what to do about the heart attempt at the bottom...beautiful, artful writing you have, but maybe im just too plain and simple to like prancy formats ( Guess being 15 does close your mind sometimes, doesnt it? Still, you have a masterful control over the language.

  • Amazingg! As I read i could see the whole thing it my head! I enjoyed this poem immensly!

  • Topnotchsy
    June 24

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    This poem is simply beautiful. The imagery shines like the climax of an award winning movie. Stunning!!


  • musie
    June 24

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    AWESOME

    I have to agree with the other comments here. This was absolutely brilliant in it's imagery and the story told in such a way, that a person could read it over and over. And the note is even more the telling. Very touching...musie


  • poppa
    June 23

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    its all been said before me, romantic with an underlying passion...

    • Hey Rob,
      My sweet friend thank you so much for your comments

      Bless you

      Rend

  • This is a brilliant poem. I love your detail. I hope I can learn from you and be as good as you someday!


  • jazzcat gold member
    June 22

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    This piece has a great tempo that adds to the feeling you are expressing. It is romantic, loving, tender and you crafted it in just that way, so the reader feels it as well as reads it. You paint the picture and your ending nails it to the wall so we can appreciate it fully. Great job.


  • AllexisReed
    June 22
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    Beautiful poem

    • thank you so much,.
      I read your poetry and it was my pleasure
      Thank you so much for your comment

      Blessings

      Rend

  • chael
    June 22

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    Well put

    wonderfully written. Don't have much faith in love myself. Don't believe in it anymore. But this is a beautiful poem if you do believe. A tip o fmy hat and keep the faith.....chael

  • It certainly paints a lovely picture. I love the bit of shape poetry at the end. You gots talent. Thanks for sharing this with me.


    Mark


  • Sandygram silver member
    June 22

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    So Beautiful Dear Niece!

    Hi Rend, You have penned such a lovely heartfelyt poem. Makes the readers sigh it is so nice.
    A pleasure to read this morning. Hugs and Smiles.

    Bless You Always,
    Aunt Sandy

    • Thank you Auntie,
      for your encouragment and support

      Bless you Aunt Sandy

      Rend


  • finchy
    June 21

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    I have only just joined this site and have read only a few poems, but this is the mst beautiful poem I have ever read. A TRUE love I hope exists in this world. Thank you x

  • deffinitely deep and spellbinding with exhuberant imagery and verbage. mind tingling intensity stunning work and visions well done

  • judmc
    June 21

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    HOODWINKED ! ! !

    A beautiful heart felt poem with some lovely thoughts and nice imagery thoroughly enjoyable/...George...


  • Cup-a-Joe
    June 21

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    ~~my foot dangling off the back porch
    swing, a steady rocking in honeysuckled
    breezes. ~~ One of the best smells in summer. Were i grew up honeysuckles grew wild.

    And This:

    your hands so lovingly speak what your
    mouth does not say, on a table by the bed
    a poem you’ve written on linen paper with
    the edges frayed ~~
    Sometimes it's what is not said by the mouth.

    I love this.

    Joe



  • Rowrocar
    June 21
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    This has made me smile today. Thank you.


  • estbelle gold member
    June 21

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    I think this is one of the most wonderful experience I've read and how ou captured that moment with your words

    and how beautiful his poetry is
    I've read it twice to re-experience the beuaty of it
    Thanks Rend


    • your welcome love,
      thank you so much for stopping and commenting

      Blessings

      Rend


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 21
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    This is one of the most profoundly beautiful things that I have read in a long while. *sigh*

  • bbear79
    June 20
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    wonderful poem


  • Floatational
    June 20

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    This poem is simply wonderful I like the imagery from the start how it takes you away to a very pleasant place, then to see the feeling of your heart beating for another's love which he gives to you in the easiest way but yet so powerful in it's form this poem screams for love and you have answered the call.

    • no it was mine Sir, your comments were well thought out and so very encouraging
      Thank you so much for your time. i was blessed more than you know

      Blessings

      Rend

  • Rend

    it is so beautiful...everything about it

    'your hands so lovingly speak what your
    mouth does not say,'

    I love this one a lot
    and you beautiful described him



  • this is a very beautiful and touching write of love and the strength found through a true love. A very enjoyable read.
    Rory


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    June 20

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    This is just awesome as is everything that you write my friend!  Such beautiful imagery comes to mind as I read through this. I love how creative you are in presenting your work here. Wonderful and always a pleasure to read you my dear! Well done and thanks so much for sharing your talent with all of us here. Take care and I hope to read more from you very soon!




    Jeremy0826

    • thank you Jeremy,
      your comments are always so encouraging
      and filled with your thoughts i so appreciate you
      so much!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • thepoetssoul
    June 19

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    Beautiful...
    Touched my soul to weep, this is fantastic writing.
    Lovely poem, thanks for sharing your heart an soul.
    Smile always.

    Tony

    • <

      Tony,

      thank you for always taking the time to come by and comment

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Stevie.me
    June 19

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    Truly Beautiful

    I loved it, it was truly wonderful, and very romantic.
    I loved how you formated it visually.

    • <

      Stevie My Dear sweeties,

      it is always a pleasure to me.when you come by and comment

      Blessings

      Rend


  • SteveS gold member
    June 19
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    Wow Rend. That is beautiful. The scene you created on the porch is sensual and vivid.


  • DolceVito gold member
    June 19

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    Wonderful piece, Rend, so filled with love, so romantic, so beautifully expressed

    Vito

    • <

      Vito,

      My sweet friend, i so appreciate your comments and applauses
      always

      Blessings to you

      Rend


  • DeJaBlue
    June 19

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    So softly beautiful and romantic. Made me a little misty. That last heartshaped bit is...well...(big sigh)

    • <

      Thank you so much for stopping your support
      means alot to me,

      Blessings

      Rend


  • penman gold member
    June 19

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    Excellent

    What romantic images you have created. And so very well expressed. Love the heart shaped ending. Thank you for sharing


  • Maxboy gold member
    June 19

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    Beautiful write Rend and as with this poem, " reflecting nothing less than brilliant."

    Wonderful Sweetie

    • <

      Don,

      you and Laura,
      are so precious to me Thank you for stopping
      and for all your support

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 19

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    Sigh and sigh again..
    You moved me you made me feel you made me love
    the poetry of music with the opening stanza's that lead on to such a wonderful ending
    and then the poem at the end .. adored it
    I am so pleased I have had the pleasure to share in your poetic world
    Cant wait to read more and more
    Your romantic heart ssssss
    Love Julie

    • <

      Julie,
      thank you for all the times that you have come by and commented!
      and for your support!

      Blessings

      Rend


  • Dixie Dawn gold member
    June 20
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    Lovely, just lovely! A beautiful write indeed!

  • aww... such a sweet poem rend!!! its gorgeous! wonderful poem my friend, absolutely wonderful

  • Breathless and beautiful, there is no praise that can be given that can compete with words like these coming from the heart.

    Good write.


  • BluesMan gold member
    June 20

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    I'm still crying as I write this comment you have put into words, the treasured feelings and emotions I will forever hold in my heart for my soul mate, who who only just passed away March 9th of this year. This is a stunningly beautiful testament of undieing love. Thank you for shareing this masterpiece with me.

    Bill


  • isaacokumu gold member
    June 20
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    fantastic dear poet, great job, wish i can write like this


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    June 20

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    This is amazingly beautiful ..the imagery i could see so clearly. You have out done yourself my dear.
    I am in awe!

    ss
    ~Lisa~

    • Thank you so much for stopping, I have some awesome poets here including your self that give me that drive, thank you so much for your comment and applause's

      Blessing

      Rend

  • My goodness. Who could not love the sentiment here? Incredibly romantic, filled with majestic ambiance that permeates the dullest of days with golden rays.

    Simply - beautiful. Thank you for sharing this with me. ~Pamela

  • friend
    June 20

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    this is very lovely and loving... makes one long for a Sunday afternoon just so. it's very beautiful sentiments. a little bit of Heaven on earth.

  • Wow, this is a touching, brilliant poem. A true pleasure to read.
    Nela


  • Dragonbabyx3
    June 20

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    This is amazingly beautiful. I love the way ths was written, painting such an amazing words! The imagery and the emotion you put into this, was absolutely stunning! Great work on this and congrats on the Poem of the day!


  • Ademon
    June 20

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    truly stunning and chilling words written, and painted such a vivid picture making me long to be that man of which you speak of... such love and tenderness, it's truly an amazing feeling that is given when reading such a beautiful poem... Thank you for sharing this with me its amazing!!!!


  • white stone
    June 20

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    Beautiful and romantic from start to finish. A well crafted verse with soft and vivid imagery. I hope this piece is true.


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    June 20

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    This is filled with such sweet sentiments! It reminds me of Summer love in the South...I dearly love the smell of Honeysuckles...this is so beautifully written, I especially like the way you ended it with the heart shaped poem at the end!!!

    Blessed Be,
    Jeremy (Raven)


  • doolie gold member
    June 20

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    This is truely beautiful Rend. Such a heartfelt and romantic write.

    Wonderful, Sis


  • rite
    June 20

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    A soft chase of metaphors extending into a pledge, penned in a streak of inspiration. The beauty of the words reflect the beauty within you.

  • Bob Fox
    June 20

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    And poet

    Lovers always should be prasing such words and saying...May the wind whisper your name. A most beautiful piece of poetry indeed.

  • love, I will be here

    for you



    ~Always~
    you out did yourself on this one..stunning to the end...I will be here forever this is awesome and I love the heart everything about this romantic write hugs Angel♥

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