I sit so silently waiting
Letting the rain trickle down my silver fur
And the sunrise radiating like fire
What I wait for- I am unsure
Only a bitter light is etched in the dawn
And in the emptiness I think I shall drown
Snow starts to fall from the winter sky
The tree that stands above me wears a white gown
My head is raised in eternal respect
Bold and dedicated to the skies
Held captive by the cosmos kingdom
Faraway a woodpecker cries
Bless the bears who hibernate
Who can gain the peace to be sleeping
While the endless minutes lure the sun behind the hills
Leaving me alone to be weeping
And the symphony of the crickets
Their melody once so divine
Is just to calm a child afraid of the thunder
Just a mere tale of moonshine
I am not immortal nor an angel of perfection
Sitting amidst a forest watching the frost drift
My eyes are moist with water that I won't admit are tears
The weight on my shoulders so heavy that my spirits cannot lift
My undivided loyalty keeps me going
Though a chorus of voices want me to forget
This vigil, they say, is foolish because
It is for someone I've never met
Wash away those doubts
Ignore the sorrow
Forever and beyond
Is one day closer to tomorrow
I will not howl to the moon
I will not admit defeat
No white flags will be raised
Until who I await I can meet
The golden sun is aroused again
Illuminating the morning dew
The Canada geese return to the North
The warm season finally renewed
The breeze caresses my face
The stillness speaks unto me
A voice inside my soul so soft
Tells me that I'm free
Yet I am and have become
The lone wolf loyal and young
Courage determination lead to
Eternal days of peace and sun
Author notes
Option 8 and 25 words from wordbank
A contest entry
- Sights & Sounds of Silence---Prompt & Options Contest PLUS Word bank (900 POINTS) by liquidmindforever.
1200 points, ended June 20, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PRWRITE CONTEST FOR ALL by serenity silvermoon.
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Bis Repetita
And the sunrise radiating like fire
What I wait for- I am unsure
Once again one respectfully draws attention to punctuation and the need to avoid filler words such as 'and the"
Sunrise radiating like fire. seems sufficient to the day.
Once again significant potential and ability within an imagination capable of both structure and relevance
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Bis Repetita? I'm not exactly French, though it would be an interesting language to take next year.
And? The? Ahh.. the greatest sorrow of life- words that one can not help but use, however much one detests them. Help me.
No. The greatest sorrow of life is receiving compliments from the same person, reddening the face even though you might think one should get used to it. You really are flattering. I like it.
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LOVE IT!
So much description, detail... (you get it) -
RULES
Dear poet,
Thank you for entering my contest SIGHTS & SOUNDS of SILENCE
Please return to the rules; there you will note that the Option name and the words you selected from the word bank are to be placed in the AN'S.
Once you've complied, please IM with TITLE of entry and CONTEST NAME.
Then, I'll be happy to read.
Until then
best wishes and
stay
liquid -
Your writing is very vivid and provides the reader with things to see, hear and experience. I like "The tree that stands above me wears a white gown" (personification) and "symphony of the crickets".
The rhymes used here are very good.
Best of luck in the contest!
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Fantastic
The way you have set this poem out is outstanding. You have written it in a way that captures the imagination of the audience from beginning to end and you well deserve the applause I have given for this piece.
Keep up the good work!
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