Soft sand under my toes...
Love around here nobody knows...
Loud cries from a ship won't yield...
Sailing along a ocean field...
The sun setting in the afternoon...
Making way for the glorious moon...
Strong waves crashing against hard rocks...
Children playing along the docks...
Seagulls flying with silent glee...
Oh the wonder of being free...
Author notes
Written March 19th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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woot!
i like it... i live by the ocean and im just like aww... how true... -
A lovely interpretation of the picture and your poem is lovely.
thank you and good luck in the contest.
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very nice!!..i too picked up on the error Tina noticed...just a tiny correction needed...you have done really well with your interpretation it's a lovely entry!...good luck in the contest...hugs...leanne xxx
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Pretty pretty
Small typo : "Sailing along a ocean field..." you need an ocean
Well done and good luck!
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Lovely imagery with this poem. The rhyming is good and the lines flowing.(only wish the seagulls around here flew with silent glee....darn things are loud!)
("Sailing along a ocean field..." the 'a' should be 'an')
Thank you for entering this
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Oh, how I wish I was that lucky! No chance for me to even get near the ocean soon!
A very good poem with some vivid images. You really made the rhyming work well. -
Hmm lovely and I just spent the day at the beach with the waves crashig on the rocks nice way to end it with a poem to remember Good Luck!
Lakota x
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