When it's cryin' time again
and your spirit's flyin' low
behind those swinging doors
a whiskey river flows.
On the jukebox Hank and Lefty
where Texas fiddles rule
honky tonkin' heroes
when country wasn't cool.
Lost and feelin' lonesome
a mind in deep distress
baby's gone for good they sang
and so's your happiness.
The same old tired story
in the lyrics of a song
broken hearted melody's
and someone's done ya wrong.
What's happened to the happy times
the channel seven news
it seems that life around us
is mired in the blues.
Yet somewhere there's a rainbow
gleaming in the sun
the sound of childrens laughter
engaged in having fun.
Why can't them cats in Nashville
write simple pomes of love
with dreams and scenes of sugar plums
and sunny skies above.
Instead of tales of woe and lust
and fanciful delights
with ladies in their skinny jeans
on straight tequila nights.
A contest entry
- ". . .good times, bad times you know I've had my share. . .but when my woman/man left home with another brown-eyed man/woman-well I still dont seem to care. . . ." by JinSays.
1003 points, ended June 21, 8 entries
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Marvelous! I love the way you incorporate themes from different country music songs. I heard some of them quite often in days gone by. That you do not gravitate to heartache is beautiful. Remember the song, "Happy Tracks"? I always love it because it was not depressing.
A very enjoyable read...music man.
Karen
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This is country at its best and an excellent question to ask, too. Perfect rhythm and I loved the way you incorporated titles into the poetry/song. The title is excellent, too.
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great stuff
Although I mus admit to liking sad songs. Thaey seem to cheer me up! There was a song on this theme sometime in the sixties (it refers to Marty Robbins' El Paso) called "Let's think about living - Let' think about life"s
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well done
I loved the ending and the part that mentioned the evening news
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Great
You have penned a terrific picture of them /thare
Cow Boys -
ohlord, where'd I put my rocky mountain jeans?
I swear I felt like I was two steppin at Cutter's Cuttin Loose-with every cute cowboy in the room. I have a thing for cowboys you see.
Love the humor, better yet-love the comments on this by the commenters. I think only one or two really got the meaning of this, and when going against a world that doesn't already understand, it's always safer to put those ideas in a funny little song. That's what country music means to me. Ask me, I can remember the words to Jose Cuervo, even though I dont think I've ever sang it sober
thanks for those memories. . .can I get a yeehaw?
Uh huh
Love,
jin -
Yes, it seems everywhere these days that it has to be morbid or it just doesn't cut the cake. To sit down and reflect on the wonderfully easy going times when a smile was far more inticing than watching someone get a smack in the mouth just for speaking their mind. Love those singers from the past who really did have something to say in their words. Todays, you can't understand at all. A wonderfully written piece filled with a lot of sentiment. Well done.
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A wonderful nostalgic read. I love feeling nostalgic, I get what you're sayin...much luck in the contest
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T'weren't
T'weren't all good times,
Hank was hand full,
Willy a mess,
Hee Haw was acting out and
Johnny C was barely legal,
not to mention Jerry Lee Lewis' stuff,
Elvis's bluzie gospel,
Muddy Waters, John Lee Hooker, and
lastly, Waylon Arnold Jennings!
The few gentlemen seemed to be Eddie Arnold and Tennessee Ernie Ford....
Anywaze, yur yearnin's evident and wrightfully so!
Damned good look-back and crafted as only you can do! I truly appreciate your work, David!
Here's a glass full of Charlie Daniels' best Jack on the Rocks to you, Happy Trails!
bjarne
PS
Notice, until now I haven't mentioned the soft underbelly of Dolly or other country vixen!
b
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You know David, you have a point and those Nashville cowboys. Where are all the good times with happy laughter and kids squealing with delight? Well done my poet friend. Good luck with the contest.
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