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Te Amo...and I Hate You.

I was just another game to you, and who ever lost would be executed on the spot. Well here I am, six feet under--are you happy now? If I could, I'd take back all those letters and I love you's because they meant absolutely nothing.

...no significo absolutamente nada.

You always said that I was wrong and maybe I was, but that never gave you a right to leave me hanging on the edge as my fingers began to slip. I waited the inevitable crash, and crash I did right into the jagged rocks that awaited me at the bottom. You wanted to see tears well in my eyes and blood seep from my veins but I was far more clever than you expected. It's all reverse psychology, isn't it? Blood ran from my eyes and tears poured from my veins as I died for the sins that you commit.

...la ironía es una cosa divertida.

How could you let us split in two? Like an earthquake along the fault line, we are stuck at two different edges and I know that I could never clear the canyon and jump to your side. You wouldn't even attempt to reach mine. I never knew this love was one sided, I never knew that while I tattooed te amo across my heart, te odio was leaving your lips. The seasons always have a tendency to crash together so I can never tell the difference until the temperature begins to change, so maybe I am just that oblivious.

...los flores del resorte comenzaron a hincharse en mi corazón, mientras que la frialdad del invierno picó el suyo.

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Prompt Numero Deux: http://i41.tinypic.com/29gdbut.jpg
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Just to get this straight I took four years of French, so I half assed this Spanish with the help of Babel Fish Sorry if it's sucky.

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  • Ohhh this isn't sucky at all -- its freaking amazing!! I loved how you added the Spanish lines in here. The imagery and metaphors just flew across the page and I love every one of them

     

    "It's all reverse psychology, isn't it? Blood ran from my eyes and tears poured from my veins as I died for the sins that you commit."

    Definitely my favorite part. Incredibly rich and powerful lines; every word pulled at my heartstrings.

     

    Wonderful job of portraying the picture; thanks so much for entering my contest and best of luck I look forward to reading your other writes♥