Leave me to my sorrow my heart it beats alone
Today is but a pathway if tomorrow dare to come
Drowned in salty cavern deep within my eyes
Weak from inner darkness threaded pulse will surely stop
Behind these walls of madness not a single glimpse of light
Roll the stone block the path tomorrow need not come
This life has been a journey I will travel it no more
Last breath drawn in reluctantly as I lay beneath the trees
No longer do I wish to suffer body overcome with grief
Let go of painful memories close my eyes fall to sleep
Tomorrow need not come for me as long as you are gone
Without your love this empty soul can not live on
Today is but a memory tomorrow never promised
Yesterday I spent wrapped in arms no longer mine
Tomorrow need not come now I long leave this place
Pain I will succumb to your sharp cold embrace
Tomorrow will not come for me as I bid this world adieu
With my love soon I will be I end this in today
A contest entry
- I must be insane. PREWRITES! by borrowing.moonlight.
720 points, ended July 30, 83 entries
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what a beautiful picture your words portrayed.
Pain I will succumb to your sharp cold embrace
that is so beautiful to me. some of your lines did not make sense, but the poem was beautiful nonetheless. thank you for your entry -
An absolutely stunning write. You do have talent in writing. Surprised with your words, they never were really what I expected. Lovely job.
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Thank you!
Thank you for taking time to read and comment on this piece I am glad you liked it!
Shannon
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wow another poems that is also awsome lol i like who you write about how i feel lol great work lol i'm gonna write more poetry!
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Superb
A very excellent write, indeed, on a sensitive subject.
You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing.
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Thank you for reading! I appreacite you taking the time to comment I will return the favor!
Shannon
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this is very beautiful. The title intrigued me, and your poem did not disappoint my expectations. The flow is very natural and unforced; it has a gentle feel to it. Very serene, which is unusual for this type of poetry, and definitely not unwelcome. I really enjoyed it.
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Thank you!
I thank you so much for your kind words on this piece! I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment I will return the favor!
Shannon
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Beautiful expression of final despair. Very accurate and moving.
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Thank you!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment I will surely return the favor!
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nice job!! The picture really starts this piece and allows for the start of a tone that is carried flawlessly throughout with the magic of your word choices!! thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome work!! peace and light always...kendal
P.S. I was born in 1971... I like your username!
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this is the most beautiful suicide poem I've ever read, and I loved the title. you showed creativity, pain, love,and lonliness in this poem and it allowed the reader to share in the pain , the pictures definitely does bring the poem to life, Excellent write, truly enjoyed this poem!
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what a beautiful picture you have painted here.... so dark and enchanting.
Tomorrow need not come for me as long as you are gone
Without your love this empty soul can not live on
This is so beautiful, I wish I had written it! Keep writing, dear poet.
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