And sorrow breathes free; their misfortune he welds
Tightly crept in serene abrasions; his scars just won’t mend
Shadows he brought, consuming the carcass of every fault.
He paves no remorse to the life he sought.
The cyanide heat rises over this meadow of death
Some wills are good, but wrath mutilates what he has made.
He fears life; torments embalmed, and breaths he took,
They haunt him back as he comes forth.
Needless to fend ways for transgression
The fleet towards disintegration shines luridly
The crimson fumes linger; ensnaring sheer cessation
Bidding goodbye to memories of ruby tints he once craved
Apart from the decadence; savoring every distress
Never inseparable from the mark of impiety, engraved
He whimpers beneath the guilt, flaying himself to death.
Now off-alone and deformed; drowning in flame he rests.
A contest entry
- Short.Stories.And.Poems...So.Many.Choises...x by Popping Balloons.
450 points, ended July 1, 17 entries
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Bidding goodbye to memories of ruby tints he once craved
Definitely my favourite part. Such an amazing poem- allows the reader to share the pain, yet remains distant enough to create suspense and mystery...makes you realise that we don't always understand the thoughts and secrets of others. Well written- keep it up
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outstanding poem you're writing is powerful and breathtaking to read I enjoyed reading it
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Apart from the decadence; savoring every distress
That Was My Favourite Part
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A beautifully written poem, nice flowing rhyming and very moving...
good luck in the contests!
take care
Suza
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Wow. This is deep. And dark. I've read many sad poems but this one is just plain sorrowful. Thank you for entering, best of luck to you.
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this is fantastic! it is sad and full of grief. thank you for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Wow...I.Actually.Cried...x
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