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careless whisper

 

Echoes of the past creep up

like late night alley cats.
Wisdom is scarce but everyone knows

what those words mean.

 

Derived from nightmares, she paralyzed me.
The type where you only hope

that you'll wake up in the morning.
And every uttered sound of silence

was another set of secrets to be uncovered.
She ran out and danced in the rain,

but it was me who looked at the sky, saying,
"Let it pour."

 

 

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Prompt: Careless Whisper

"dipit"

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  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    amazing. I loved reading it. I loved your word useage... I felt emotions as I read it. Flowed wonderfully. Great write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • pain is love.
    July 13

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    THis is a amazing! I really loved the lines

    Echoes of the past creep up
    like late night alley cats.

    They really drew me into the piece. Thank you for this wonderful entry!


  • Antebellum
    July 10

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    Wow. another stunning write from you.

    The type where you only hope
    that you'll wake up in the morning.

    wonderful lines.


  • Badass Brea
    June 29

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    I dance in the rain, it's my me time. I am unabashed, unashsmed & I dance like no one is watching. I wish I had someone to stand in the shadows and tell it to pour.

    -Brea


  • Gods only child
    June 18
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    this a verynice poem!

  • Blind Guardian
    June 18
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    Wow thats really good!

  • Blind Guardian
    June 18
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    Wait! isn't there a song called careless whisper by seether?


  • PinkeyPromise
    June 18
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    simply amazeing


  • Lotus-Mama
    June 18
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    Hauntingly beautiful. Stunning write, poet!!!


  • Candy Morphine
    June 18

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    Wisdom is scarce but everyone knows
    what those words mean.
    -that is very daunting and the feel of impending climax is apparent. i think it really sets the atomosphere of the poem accuratly, a little dark.


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    June 18

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    Amazing! I am so glad to be friends with poets who are friends with such great poets. lol... I loved this!!


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 18
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    why thank you, but
    you're awesomER! lol


  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 18
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    anytime, always a pleasure
    reading your poetry


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    June 18

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    Oh wow indeed I agree with cyanide..i love where you took it..
    One of your best indeed , I wish you luck

    but hun this one kicks *ss

    Love
    Passions

  • perfectsunset gold member
    June 18

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    Wow, your pieces are always
    so in-depth and filled with much
    insight, always learn something
    from you. You took the prompt
    beyond the sky, and it worked
    so well. Loved the ending a lot.

    Beautifully scribed!

    & best wishes


  • Cyanide Dreams
    June 18

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    Wow, nicely done. I love where you took this. Your imagery is great and your emotions are very strong. I loved the last line. I think in the second to last line though, did you mean "she ran out and danced" or "she ran out to dance"? Great job though, and good luck in the contest.

    Josh


  • DramaQueen469 gold member
    June 18

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    ...Wow. This is beautifully powerful; a phenomenal take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest

    ♥ Maria ♥

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