The other day I was kind of down
So I decided, I'm goin on a walk
I walked for a while until I found a place to sit
Then, I felt the need to talk
I looked up at the sky
Hoping to see you
Up in the clouds
Didn't know where to talk to
I decided you must be up there
Cause that's where you belong
Over the rainbow
Like that one old song
I asked you how you're holdin up
Are you doin okay
I couldn't get very many words out
But I had so much to say
I told you that I miss you
Every minute of every day
I asked you why you left
Why you had to go away
I did something then
That I hadn't really done in a while
I looked up at the sky
and I started to smile
Then I couldn't help it
I started crying
I still can't believe your gone
I never planned on you dying
Then I looked up again
I told you a lot
I told you that with you gone
I'm all I've got
I told you how much it hurts somedays
How in science I want to cry
But to avoid making a scene
I won't break down if I really try
then I asked you what's it like
To not be here anymore
Does it feel good to never wake up
And realize your neck is sore?
Then I realized it was getting dark
But I had one more thing to say
I said I'd never forget you
And then I walked away
Author notes
R.I.P Alicia Mead 6/26/1996-2/24/09
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Comments
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very beautiful indeed..i always think of things to ask my mom...if i ever just stopped and looked up the sky..and ask all the things..i wanted..even tho..she wouldnt answer..i know that she heard me..but anyways...
great write...
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Brilliant If I keep reading it a few more times I would be in tears. I knew from the middle half of the piece that this poem was about the loss of someone a friend or maybe a sister. When I was eight I lost my grand mom. At times I would look up at the sky see some shapes and say see that's my grand mom waving down to me. I have just faced the loss of a dear friend two years ago. It's hard to believe their gone and so we keep on talking to them because it makes us feel better like that person is still there with us. I know how you feel this poem is a brilliant write indeed. Don't worry it will be ok. If you ever need to talk feel free to message me.
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