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[ I was told the other day ]

I was told the other day
to pray;
to talk to God
and tell him what I wanted

But I do not need
anything from him

You see,
When I was a little girl
I got down on bended knee
And talked to God,
most humbly,
and gave him a simply plea:

Make my enemies foolish

Make there words sound like baaa's
like the sheep they
compare themselves to

Make there minds full of fables
like the stories they hold
so dear

Make my rivals
ridiculous Lord
So that I may find a way
to laugh


I see now,
being older,
He has granted my request

Author notes

INspired by my favorite enlightened author Voltaire

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  • carebear123
    July 8
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    oh i love this. all of ur writes are so intruging. i liek that.


  • happy kitty kat
    July 2

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    oh see,

    i said nothing about religion, this is not too good but i will review this more later, and skip the DQ. thanks 4 entering tho


  • No Quarter
    June 24

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    i never really read much by Voltaire, but this poem is very good. again, the first couple of verses mislead me! i thought it would be about how you prayed to god and he never gave you what you asked for. wrong again!
    very good write.


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 19

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    Our enemies often become enemies simply because they display the sort of behavior we fear most within ourselves. Not always, though. I compete with only myself; then, there's always room for improvement.

  • arnal
    June 18
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    Love it, love the ending, everybody around doesn't have good sense,interesting write

  • goatfish
    June 18

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    I realized it was Voltaire like half way through and that was cool. The man had a lot of good things to think about. Maybe God and him shared the same enemies and they were friends by that extension. When I think about the time period, that might be about right, but.......good read.

  • SimplySonnets gold member
    June 18

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    Loved your irony, your tale is a delight, well written and as always very thought provoking, thank you.


  • Fallen-Muse
    June 17

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    Very beautiful. I liked this a lot although your style is so chaotic.
    Thank you so very much for sharing I really enjoyed it.

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