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Void.

Couldn't make it out of bed today

my heart was too heavy

and that sickness called love

suppressed my appetite.

 

 

Regurgitated bile signifies emptiness,

a void of you which longs

to be in that zone of OK.

 

 

Every blink brings a vision

and a tear drop to quench

a pain that will grow wild

in a garden of woe.

 

 

You are my strength...

          help me lift this heart

before it breaks to pieces

and seeps through

the cracks of once was.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    August 2

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    Hell, don't I know that bitch called love, she is always on my doorstep, though I've told her she's not welcome. Beautifully passionate and very well worded. Simple, but complex at the same time.


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    June 23
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    Darkly poignant...

    I felt the subject's pain in this heart-wrenching poem.
    Good work! Wishing you all the best in the contest!!
    Peace, love & hugs, xx Cyn

  • LovingPhoenix
    June 22
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    Beautiful! I can feel the pain and sadness! Really good flow!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 18

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    Oh my... your emotional imagery is so painful I can feel it myself! Writing at its best here.


    Delila


  • Papabear 4 Rosered
    June 18
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    That's pain

    Deep and powerful. Very well writen. Thanks for entering your work.


  • Arithni
    June 18

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    Lovely and dark

    I love the tone of this work! It flows as somber as your words dictate. It is nice to see a well-written piece about the darker side of our emotions.


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    June 18

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    I can't pin point my favorite line in this.
    Great job you have done here. Good luck in the contest.
    Love ya
    Juls


  • Pure Thought silver member
    June 17
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    Pick the love who makes you laugh.
    Strong write, well done, just sad my dear.


  • geckogirl silver member
    June 17

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    Stength be yours...well done on the contest
    Much Love sent your way


  • Cannonsfire
    June 17

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    Psst. 'strength' ...Been in that place before and it's never a nice one but then again when love is true it never gets to the void. It's the finding it that is hard C

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