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Shake me

Sober with no place to go.
Alone.
Somewhere out there.....I am.
Nobody came.
Ever.
Wake me.
God
      Shake
              this
                    Body
                          Alive.

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  • Little Brat
    September 21
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    I'll give you a shake!


  • blueyez
    September 13
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    Like a bad dream you can't wake up from...


  • exclamationpoint.
    July 20

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    The entirety of this piece was breathtaking, due to the certain aspects woven in that really held it high. First, the word "sober" created a deeper sympathy for the speaker. It's placing in the first line added to the poem as well; I believe that many could relate to the emotion being formed here. Also, the "God...Alive" section intrigued me: your way of making emphasis is quite powerful, not to mention peculiar. I loved this work!!


  • XXXFlipperXXX
    June 17
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    Thank you

  • SleepyShelly
    June 17
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    Short but powerful...Thanks for sharing!

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