I collapse in tears,
Because of My mother’s soft smile.
Because of my dad’s gentle voice.
Because of all things that once were,
Distant memories
Memories.
I'll never get over them.
They haunt me.
Now I am bouncing like a trampoline
From job to job.
Never happy.
Never satisfied.
When it is warm outside,
I have a chill.
When it is cold,
Sweat drips down my face.
I drink myself to tears,
What am I crying for?
Misery?
Lost Love?
Lost Life?
I don’t know.
I really don’t.
Like everybody else I awake in the morning.
Place one shoe on at a time.
Hung over from the night before.
I won’t be happy until my casket is ordered.
I’m not picky, get it off ebay.
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Comments
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the first two lines of this poem are what drew me in - their contradiction, the idea that the soft smile or thought of kindness brings pain. i think the first stanza is by far the strongest. and i would go so far as to say it can stand alone. i think you could end the poem at "They haunt me" - everything else that follows in the poem is pretty much already implied by that first poignant stanza. but you could take some other tidbit of info from the poem and graduate it to title status (instead of "Lost in Memories") like "Lost Life", "Lost Love", "One Shoe at a Time" or "Hung Over - Again".
just some thoughts.
anyway i have savored this slice of your life. cheers!
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BRILLIANT CUT DIAMOND...
I have enjoyed the reading of "Lost in Memories" for its contents and poetic grand.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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