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Night In Valdosta

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Oh, lonesome man,
the lady hides in a stolen frame
too far from the tracks;
your chest is its cradle when
you cry for the way back home;

but rain will never blot the love
and destination of the ride is nigh;
after all, Georgia’s tracks are
as long as the night, and your
life is nowhere but in God’s hands.

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  • Mountain Woman gold member
    August 30

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    This is wonderful. I am really picky. Again, wonderful.


  • tdawnhughes
    June 30
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    This is beutiful and very short and to the point!!!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    June 17

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    He will never let you fall. I remember as a child hearing train horns in the night, in the distance, somehow sounding lost . . . looking for the dawn.

    There is the quite of stillness in this poem. Very well done.

    Garrison

  • sleepinglion
    June 17
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    Beautiful, wisdom in sadness in fact
    David

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