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Butterfly

Butterfly, lately I wish I could be like you
You can be flying free, you're colorful too
So beautiful, as long as both my eyes can see
Freely in the sky, that's the way you should be

Butterfly, your wings shine like diamond stone
Always together, I bet you'll never be alone
Morning time and you'll be ready for your roam
When it's dark, it's time for you to be back home

Butterfly, suddenly you're gone to another place
Soon you'll reach the high in the state of grace
Fly over the rainbow then you had everyone in daze
Your beauty shines, then you had everyone amazed

Butterfly, come and gone suddenly through the dawn
Back again and you bring the happiness all around
You bring sincerity through every person's heart
You show everyone that this life won't be too hard

Butterfly, soon you will find the right place to go
Beautiful place where love and happiness would grow
There will a kindness of heart that you want to show
And your beauty will always be saved in the afterglow

Author notes

ii'ts happii tiime =]
i dont get it, the fly isnt full of butter, so why the name butterfly?!?

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  • They Say Shannon
    June 22

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    Actually,
    butterflies used to be called flutter by. (:

    "Butterfly, your wings shine like diamond stone
    Always together, I bet you'll never be alone"

    I really liked that imagery.

    Some of the rhyming sounded forced and you were missing some much needed syllables in some lines.
    Overall the imagery was nice.

    Thanks for entering.


  • As Blood sheds
    June 21
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    i liked it alot. it was very good. yer a good writer. =]


  • Bohemianwriter
    June 17

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    i thought it was fab! dude :-)
    loved the rhyme. and everything!, haha maybe you should write happy poetry more often!, but ya know as happy and cheery as it sounded there was this morbid vibe to it, that i could feel...weired. but brill! xx

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