I see a tree though it's not real,
Although when I reach to it I feel.
This life is strange and none the clearer
That man looking at me isn't real in the mirror.
I am haunted by my reality dreams,
The days of this past may not be what it seems.
I live through my day, and enjoy all the bliss,
Awake in my bed, was there something I missed?
I went to a bar and I fought a strange man,
I wiped my eyes and was locked in a van.
Sitting down to dinner with my wife and kids,
But when I stare at the reflection, the movie seems to end.
Picking up my child, I hold him, my eyes are closed,
I'm in a white room, chained, Depersonalized diagnosed.
Author notes
This poem was written for a contest and the theme was "Mental Illness" my topic was depersonalization disorder.
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Comments
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I really like the rhyme here.
In between,
"The days of this past may not be what it seems.
I live through my day, and enjoy all the bliss,"
you could space it, and make 'i live through my day" a new stanza.
great write.
thanks for entering. -
a good write, thank you for entering
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This was beautifully written, thank you so much for entering.
plus i loved the title -
Wow, this was a very intense
piece in terms of emotion
and the power of pulling the
mind. It's hard when people
have these mental disorders,
because their mind is in
control of them.
You have expressed yourself
clearly & vividly, really
portraying the aspects
of this disorder.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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