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-things i cannot photograph-

 

I'm blind. Each and every day seems to strike me with another affliction and I never see it coming. There's so much I wish I understood, various things that seem trivial but in truth, burden me so. I wonder how far away I am from the reason why I see shadows instead of sunlight. Today has grabbed its weapon and in result, made a mess of me.

 

I just wish silence could be free. That if I decided not to speak up and if my tongue shunned the very words I spoke, that I wouldn't have to be reminded of what an outcast I am. Maybe I like it that way, maybe. My mind just wants to find a place to rest its weary head, but no such luck yet.

 

If all these things trouble me and keep me standing still, then I'll just close my eyes and dwell on better times, like the Kodak moments and the times when my heart is alive and beating. Please, leave me here. In a few seconds, you'll forget everything and I'll be just another name.

 

That's how it always is.

 

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Prompt: Title: -THINGS I CANNOT PHOTOGRAPH-

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  • dutch2lips gold member
    July 24
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    there are many in your frame of mind, well written poem, thank you for entering


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    ahh now this one I can really relate to it. Very deep... and I truly like the one line ending. Great job. Very well written. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    July 3

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    This is beyond words. I can completely relate to this, I love it. It's like you put my jumbled thoughts and feelings and organized it. This is amazing

    x


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    June 27

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    Now, I really like this entry... Simply because I can totally relate to the words you speak...
    "There's so much I wish I understood, various things that seem trivial but in truth, burden me so. I wonder how far away I am from the reason why I see shadows instead of sunlight. Today has grabbed its weapon and in result, made a mess of me."
    It's like you've reached in, and said what I feel at times.. *sigh*
    Of course, this all goes down with the things that cannot be photographed, a pissed off look could never compare to the thought that was behind it..

    I'm glad you found my contest! Great job working with the prompt

    Amber


  • of insincerity
    June 24

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    i am nowhere near the poetic excellence that you are. that being said, i don't quite know how to comment. i love how self aware you are, and at the same time it kind of hurts, if that makes any sense at all.

    "My mind just wants to find a place to rest its weary head, but no such luck yet."


  • neurosine gold member
    June 19

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    I think you're telling us how you think you feel, and how you idealize these things and I suspect you should just give the facts and modify them with imagery so we can get the joke for ourselves, and still in the end understand you deeper.
    I write this way too. I'm too literal and try guiding the reader by my perspective. Better that you lay some things down and everyone gets an approximation of understanding, than that you lay it out for them.
    Utterly hypocritical, but I don't see any reason other people shouldn't benefit from my mistakes if I've corrected them or not. I mean, I'm not being a dick or anything, or trying to restrict you. It's advice.
    Don't tell us what it seems like to you, explain it to us, so we may experience it for ourselves.
    Maybe interjecting some unorthodox conclusions or insight along the way. Not that you haven't done the latter...but you have skipped the former.


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    June 18
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    This. is. AMAZING.
    Loved it.

  • DecorusApparatus
    June 18

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    Okay, you've officially taught me that I should no longer enter in any contests that you have - you're simply too good. This is quite exceptional, and I have to say I felt the most ties with the first stanza. Excellent work, keep it up!!


  • Candy Morphine
    June 18

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    I wonder how far away I am from the reason why I see shadows instead of
    -COMPLETELY LOVE that. every little while you stumble across pure genius and today is one of those days.

    Today has grabbed its weapon and in result, made a mess of me.
    -again, brilliant.

    In a few seconds, you'll forget everything and I'll be just another name.
    -i totally adore this poem. i say this in all honesty, it is perfect


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    June 18

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    I can in so many ways relate to some of what you have said in this poem
    the empty spaces to be filled that wishing to be alone, to ponder, to release the traps
    set free
    best wishes and good luck
    Julie

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