Head is pounding.
Heartbeat speeding.
Eyes are bulging.
Breaths quickening.
Thoughts are racing,
Footsteps nearing.
Doors bursting;
Open
Fists are flying.
Blood is pouring.
Evil showing,
Darkness growing.
Head is spinning,
Heartbeat slowing.
Pupils dilating,
Breaths stopping.
Thoughts ceasing.
Footsteps subsiding.
Doors slamming;
Closed.
Author notes
Not exactly sure what I was going for here; it just happened. 
Title was just off the top of my head. Other suggestions for that would be nice as well, thanks. 
What did you think
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Most definitely a unique and effective format. If you read it slowly you are really able grasp the images and get the full effect...and think about what is going on.
It is sad that this happens, but it does.
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the title throws it off but I loved the poem, it is about abuse & death, I'd change the title the poem is nicely written and it has a deep meaning. good job!! I enjoyed how you went step by step this is how abuse starts. and it does sometimes end in death. this is inspirin
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