Years have come and gone,
growing, changing,
but you're still the one for me...
It's not been easy,
it's not been fun,
more like a roller coaster ride...
but baby, you're still the one,
the one I want to grow old with,
the one I want to feel next to me,
and the face I want to see in the moonlight,
in the sunshine, and the rain.
It took more than chance,
more than a prayer to set this fire
aglow the second time around...
Things happen for a reason, that we know,
but tell me, why so long?
Can it be that we were just too blind to see?
Will you take a chance on me,
if I take the chance on you...
cause baby...
you're still the one for me.
Author notes
*For Someone~
In a list
A contest entry
- ...Still The One... by Desire.
1221 points, ended June 18, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: Still the one for me...
This piece tugged hard at Spirit and after reading several times ~
I'm Honored also Humbled You took the time to pen for my contest
You took the prompt and brought forth much for the Mind to feast upon~
Bravo!! When I digest words written, images come through that grab hard~
Woven Strengths: It took more than chance,
more than a prayer to set this fire aglow the second time around...
These lines swelled the eyes- for I was seeing tears falling as if - much time lapsed- and I wouldn't say wasted but lost- as in lost in translation However translation is to be defined I am being shown a babe in Mother's arms- boy- and the Joy this child brings however also being shown word: struggles~ I am being shown reference to:
pinching pennies~ and while reading again: shown an image of a female laughing and smiling~ like on this ride- big wheel- and laughing
Looks like from the late 70's because I am seeing show: Good Times
Reference to chicken noodle soup from scratch And KC and the Sunshine Band- also phrase: Let the Good Times Roll Now the lines that grabbed
also pulled- I was seeing ABBA- this is the second write which showed me ABBA
and also hearing song: Rock the Boat- ...
Hopefully my comment to Your write makes sense
Powerful verse and message You have brought forth
These words grabbed and pulled~
Will you take a chance on me,
if I take the chance on you...
Vivid Imagery poured in these lines...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Voice
also best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too 
with much love and light~ Desire~*~
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I love the raw emotion in this, simply no holds barred. Laying it all on the line, just putting it out there, yet in such a smooth manner. This was such an easy read dear. I am sure that someone is going to melt when they read it.
Luv ya bunches,
Suzi
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Really good
Excellent conveyance, love the emotional content behind it. Kind of reminds me of a Shania Twain song titled "Still the One". I am sure the person you wrote this for is touched by it.
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You hit a grand slam on this one. I love your poems I look forward to them each day. Your thoughts flow so magically onto the paper. You are such an easy read for me,, love your words and phrasing qualities. This line...
It took more than chance,
more than a prayer to set this fire
aglow the second time around...
This is so like you, made me read it twice. Great job, and keep it up.
John
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This was wonderful,Nye! I could feel the love within your words. I so know the feeling deep within. Just want you to be happy with all you do and this showed happiness.. Just wish you all the best. Loves ya bunches, Mandi
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my dear soul sis you know i have always said i want you to be happy and i can feel the love and happiness within your words. you have deff shown love reunited well done and many blessings always xxx
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