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Through the Eyes of a Child

A small but happy child
In a world he would never see
Yet breathing beautiful life
Into those so filled with need

No one would ever know
From this child with blinded eyes
How he could sense the pain of others
When they were in need of opened minds

His world so filled with darkness
But his soul provided light
Healing hearts of lonely people
Clearing clouds from their saddened sight

A grand message he delivered
With a sweet and happy voice
Offering up his simple kindness
With a present of his choice

Sharing his heart with others
So perfect and so clean
His mission was to share
All the things his mind had seen

Then off again to play
In his world so undefined
Ever searching for another
To help their sight unbind

If a lesson we could learn
From a child so perfectly sweet
Is to open our battered minds
So our eyes could actually see

 

 

 

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  • AllexisReed
    July 25
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    By far, this is one of my favorites in this contest. Just beautiful. Good luck!


  • BluesMan gold member
    July 22

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    His world so filled with darkness
    But his soul provided light
    Healing hearts of lonely people
    Clearing clouds from their saddened sight

    This stanza could have stood alone as an entry into the contest. Your poem was rich withn heart felt sentiment. Thank you for entering my contest.

    • An Old Codger gold member
      July 22
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      Thanks so much for your kind comment. Very much appreciated. The inspiration provided by a poem as wonderful as "The Park Bench" made this a pleasure to write.


  • daviscth silver member
    June 29

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    What a wonderful and very moving poem you've created from the prompt. I love the imagery. Good luck in the ocntest.


  • Celtic Legend
    June 24
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    beautiful. i wish you luck!
    Celtic


  • Still Standing gold member
    June 17

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    I truly felt this was a beautiful write and a lovely interpretation of the PArk Bench. You very eloquently showed us what life is truly meant to be like from the child's perspective and not from our own wretched and battered minds. Yes a "child shall then" even if that child is blind, it shows that the spirit of the child is what we shall follow. great write!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 16

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    Ah...before I got to the end of your moving write, I knew the theme was the Park Bench, and so you have masterfully shared the lessons we all need to learn, and that is to see the hardship of another to be thankful for what we have.... penning!

  • eveningdrift
    June 16

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    old codger - I like the opposing attitudes of 'happy child' and 'battered minds'. it gives me real pause to think how we progress in reverse. nicely put

    • An Old Codger gold member
      June 16
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      Thank you for the comment.
      Yes, we do tend to forget what it was like to live simply and happily as a child. The tragedies and trials of life can take their toll if we aren't mindful of our change in attitude and outlook. Sometimes we need a good swift kick in our emotions to snap us back to what's really important.


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    June 16

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    I love the sentiments of this write!
    You dug deep within to express the tender emotions you have described here.Nicely penned!


    • An Old Codger gold member
      June 16
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      Thank you so much my friend. Your comments are always a pleasure to read.


  • Heroesrox
    June 16

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    "grand message he delivered
    With a sweet and happy voice
    Offering up his simple kindness
    With a present of his choice

    Sharing his heart with others
    So perfect and so clean
    His mission was to share
    All the things his mind had seen

    Then off again to play
    In his world so undefined
    Ever searching for another
    To help their sight unbind"

    Ahhhhhh. Very nicely penned. This is an absolutly fantastic piece. Thanks very much for the share. Best wishes and good luck to you.


    • An Old Codger gold member
      June 16
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      Thank you very much for the comment. Always appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed this.


  • darell
    June 16

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    Excellent!

    I love the sentiments of this lovely write. You really dug inside to express such tender and kind emotions. Very inspirational. Nice Job!

    • An Old Codger gold member
      June 16
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      Thank you very much for your kind words. I had read the prompt poem before but had forgotten all about it. It was a treat to read it once again.

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