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As I pause in the park

Drowning
in Dawn pierced oceans'
depths imperceptible,
I inhale ambrosial auras
and scattered words
sinking to me,
"Sir...? ... interested...flowers?"

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 22, 2009
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    How very sad. But this was an awesome take. I didn't expect it.