The oars that churn in the depthless ocean
The storm that beats against her bow,
We breathe in the salty sea
The time has come to end our day.
The Day's Plain stretched before us
Endless miles behind the wafting wood,
There we stood
And still no where to go.
The Abiding place of Boats sides
Oh rolling one,
Land of fair winds,
I call to thee.
Upon my voice is an echo,
An echo of your heart and sea,
The hound of the sail
It curls itself around me.
My face uplifted toward the air
Daughter of Mundilferi
Like God
You touch my face.
Lying quiet,
Essence of the day,
Your waves are magical
Glistening my ears.
Hark thee,
Upon the moonlight hours.
Take God upon me,
My hair against your sails.
My last breath
Takes to the salty air,
God holds out his hands
and I swim from there.
Author notes
Written March 18th, 2004
A contest entry
- Contest for new March members ~Come Sail Away~ by Barbara.
300 points, ended April 3, 2004, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is the first entry with a Nordic feel about it and I like it very much. Thank you for your entry and good luck.
~Von~
(In Nordic Tradition Mundilferi's daughter Sol drives the Sun chariot with the horses Arvakr (Early Dawn) and Alsvid (Scorching Heat).) -
JenicaS this is a really pretty poem. The descriptions are crafted with elegance and brought to life with passion. I enjoyed reading. Good luck and welcome to the site.
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Interesting take on the picture. It is a nice read, a little trouble with the flow in places, but has an intriguing story to it.
Thank you for entering this
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nice concept...i think you did a good job here on imagery etc....apart from one or to that left me slightly puzzled...for example...depthless ocean...i have never percieved an ocean as depthless...but apart from that i think this was a really good entry...good luck in the contest!..hugs..leanne xx
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Hmm very interesting almost as if your letting go of life and the ship of life sails away leaving you alone and empty. Good luck!
Lakota x
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