precious stones wait
on a fair canvas
and compare to daisies
‘till stealer of time
snatches sparkle;
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she enters adulthood
Author notes
image prompt: http://miss-deathwish.deviantart.com/art/n-126035581
20 words.
In a list
A contest entry
- Quickie Now #40 by amaranthine lover.
1000 points, ended July 1, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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this is very beautiful dear, thanks for sharing!
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very short but interesting thank you so much for sharing. I really enjoyed this pice good luck on everything and keep up the amazing work.
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great
this is a great job. i wish i can give more than this
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How long did it take you to write this? It doesn't seem like you put much time in it. I do however see effort which is the spark you need to write poetry. The big gap between the last line... what does that offer? The effort seems tremendous and you seem well read but this poem does not have the zest needed to win a contest. However, I could be wrong
I say none of this to hurt your feelings. I think you have a promising start. You should read some of my first poems- they are awful and my poems currently, I cannot brag about. My point is to keep writing and hold your head up. Don't hate me... it is a good poem, I just think you can do even better.
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I have to admit it took me a couple of hours (not long I know) but then again the contest only asked for 20 words, so any more time spent would be silly. The gap was to represent a movement of time, maybe I should add punctuation too. Hey, you win some, you lose some. Thanks for the comment.
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Different! I like that Best of luck
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Oh yes perfectly said
Beaufully scripted piece of poety
best wishes and good luck
Julie
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