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Razor Blade Relief

Razor blade kisses my wrist, unsteadily slides down my arm
Leaving behind a crimson trail of glistening blood
Look into the shattered mirror lying on my floor
Mascara rivers bleeding down my cheeks
I wince at the first cut but sigh with vital relief
Like my blood, out pours my fears and frustrations
It streams down my forearm, shattered onto my black pants
Disappears, just like that, along with my fears
The gashes supply pleasure, no pain
They make me feel beautiful
I will love myself as soon as I'm beautiful
Yank my sleeves down over my wrists to hide my latest release
I feel free, free as a bird, nothing holding me down
Until next time
when my trusty razor blade finds my wrist again
Each time, it's harder to lose my adhered paranoia
The necessary release becomes farther away each time
I will cover my arms up and mask my despair
Until the next time becomes the last time

Author notes

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Option A #4
A girl who can only deal with her frustrations and fears through mutilating herself. The mutilations make her feel beautiful though because they release her pain. Eventually she takes it too far, making it the last time

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  • foreveryourslove
    September 6

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    this was a very awsome poem i loved the detail you put into it it was vey good and yeah i understand how it feels when you put that razor to your skin. well thanks for entering my contest...


  • Leanna-bean
    August 25
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    Amazing...Thank you so very much for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck to you my friend!!!


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    July 30
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    damn this reminds me of something i've written...
    well written anyways... thank you for the entry
    by the way
    Mascara rivers bleeding down my cheeks
    very visual! way to go


  • l o v e b u r s t
    July 7
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    Sad. love the first line. " Razor blade kisses my wrist"

    Thank you for entering my contest


  • Patched Up Ragdoll
    July 1
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    You know...I'm really not a big fan of cutting, or poetry about cutting, or anything silly like that.


  • BrokenHeartsInVain
    June 26

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    ''Until the next time will be my last time''. Loved it. Loveled it to death. That's almost EXACTLY what goes through my mind when I cut. The only thing that frustrates me is that not many people get the emotional sence right when they write the poems, they portray actions, and some thoughts, but not the emotional numbness and pure melecholy (excuse me if I spelled that wrong) that I normally feel. And GOD there's a lot of entries.

    Try to feel better, kay?
    Thank you for entering and best of luck. ♥


  • Bright Lights
    June 23

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    "Mascara rivers" is my favourite part. And the ending is really strong.
    I love this write, its so powerful.
    Thanks for sharing


  • cazzy71
    June 16

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    another inventive write

    Yet again another unusual,inventive write,angst ridden,poignant,deep.Well constructed,well spaced.Great


  • Miss Macabre
    June 16

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    Good. Like the self disgust, the lines:
    The gashes supply pleasure, no pain
    They make me feel beautiful

    Good luck to you!

  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    June 16

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    really well written. i love your descriptions and your use of words, it makes the poem a great read. keep writing, friend. =]


  • PinkeyPromise
    June 16

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    ahhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! this it a great poem! very expressive! very deep and dark! great write chick!

    xoxo
    Divine.Tragedy


  • Avalanche.Echo
    June 16

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    I liked it. The metaphor was good, the flow was excellent.
    My favorite line is "Until the next time becomes the last time." It just sort of struck me.
    However, this line: "More required cuts each time to make the necessary release" was a little awkward. Perhaps consider rewording it?
    Good luck


  • Avalanche.Echo
    June 16
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    Don't forget to put your option in your author's note. I'll comment on it once you have.


    • Allyson.Lashae.
      June 16
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      yeah I just fixed that and some other parts and then read your comment haha, sorry about that

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