Her tears fell onto her flesh like acid,
Making her feel the pain that she so desperately wanted to throw away.
How does the tale of love come to be so lucid?
Why does it have to hurt more then a sapphire flame?
The shadow of his silhouette finally disappeared into the night,
Making her heart ache for the longing of a free love.
Icy pools, frail and swift, held the image of her in the candlelight
Before he told her goodbye.
How could she forget how the light made his gorgeous face so sad?
How could she no longer hear the words of regret spill from his soft lips?
Over and over, the widow's trap of pain sent her into a madness that filled her soul
And turned her world around into knots and rips.
Taking a few steps away from the eclipse he made for her,
She fell to her knees and cried out in pain.
Her heart ripped at the seams as her mind played as a continuous reel
That tortured her soul to numb and drain.
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Sometimes when i see "he and she" I lose intrest easily as to a "she and she" situation lol. but this piece is horribly intense and like this frigid flesh burning swirl of darkness. Well done
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Thanks
^.^ I'm glad you liked it. My feelings seem to be in this mood as of recent, since, you know, the love in my life isn't there anymore. But it's all good, and I'm glad I can keep your interest.
Tawnerz
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Very strong. I could really feel the pain that was portrayed in the poem. I liked it alot. Well done. Keep up the good work.
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Am i going to have to put bananas down somebodys tale pipe!
I love you man beautiful poem
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Thank you, Lissa.
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You really emphasised your emotions and the expression was brilliant. I would like to see this entirely from YOUR angle because its your pain and no one elses. But a great poem none the less
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Thank you, I tried to make it an "I" poem, but it just wasn't making sense because of all the feelings I felt. So it came out easier by putting her, as if I was looking at myself from the outside. But thank you so much for your comment, and, I love your display pic. ^.~ Thank you, Tawni
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Very deep and real... Your pain leaks through this.. amazing work
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Thank you, it means a lot that my words touched you. Thank you so much for reading.
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well very vivid... I feel your pain. Your hurt. I applaud your openness, and allowing in Us into your heart... thank you...
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You're very welcome. But thank you for reading my poem and accepting the feelings that I put in it.
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This is very sad but beautifully written.
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awww this is soo sad. but really good. the imagry is very good. keep the ink flowing!
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I'd like to know as well.
its a good sad poem, very vivid imagery and interesting word choices. :]
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Thank you for your kind comment, and yes, the emotions are raw and real, it helped serve the imagery in this poem. I really appreciate that you took the time to read it. It means a lot. Thank you.
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awww dis is really good its sad...i like it. did this happen to u? if u dont mind my asking?
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I think it's happened to a lot of people in their lives, watching the one they love walk away from them, and this has happened to me, yes. But the imagery was based off of pure emotion and complete emptiness I felt when the man I loved more than life walked from my life. So, yes, the emotions are raw and pure. Thank you for asking.
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