Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Outa Here!

Put your hands on me?
Whacha thinkin G?
Did ya think I'd let ya?
Yeah....betcha!

Don't need ya round
To drag me on down
Don't push and shove
You call that love?

You won't, you won't,you won't Oh no!
I ain't no God forsaken Ho
Won't do a thing, been here to long
I'll walk away and you'll be gone!




A contest entry

How does this poem make you feel? What was your general impression?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

1 - 5 of 5

  • poetrandy
    June 26

    Edit | Reply

    Great poem!

    Another very good, well written poem! I like this one! Your written English dialect is very good and most interesting! I can see why you won silver with this one!


  • Gypsy Via Orleans
    June 21

    Edit | Reply
    That's how you handle getting somebody off your ass. I like this. Women, let's say this all together now, "We ain't takin' no more shit!"

  • Topnotchsy
    June 20

    Edit | Reply
    Not what I'm used to from you, but well worth the silver trophy it snagged. Nice write here and welcome back.


  • dismantle-me
    June 16

    Edit | Reply
    I like the forceful, outraged tone to this poem. It is full of strength, and the line "I ain't no God forsaken Ho" really made me giggle, so thank you!


    • firefly53633
      June 20
      Edit | Reply

      Thank you!

      I really went out on a limb for this contest. This is really out-of-the-box for me! LOL!
      Thanks for the silver. Enjoyed the challenge!
      Best regards

1 - 5 of 5