She rides waves of the purest rays,
creaking wooden frames barely supporting
her weight.
Nails dig in as she takes in the masochistic
pleasure of the pain caused by hundreds
of splinters sliding into her skin.
The echoes of her charm
resound throughout the apartment room
just as he enters in.
Author notes
http://scarabuss.deviantart.com/art/mldy-69-126054093
A contest entry
- Happy Birthday to Me, Happy Birthday to me...Okay I have 2 1/2hours til then by PassionsPromise.
1050 points, ended June 25, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites by Dragonbabyx3.
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soo....whats your honest opinion?
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*runs and jumps into a COLD shower* Phew... This had me hot in the first few lines 
Amazingly written, and spicy enough to have me goin! And all before he gets there too! Wow... The only thing I could possibly see wrong with this, is it needs to be longer 
Love ya Kath, Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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You pleasured the pain, don't know how. It's what you write Kath, and you're good at it!
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Aww, thanks so much!
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oh yea glad you entered lol
Great job and thanks alot honey
Love
Passions
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Sorry it wasn't longer hun, my brain is so fried
Mucho blessings on your b-day! Don't forget to have plenty of fun
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O.o
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What's wrong love? XD
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