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Breaking

the cracking pieces of her heart
sink with each word
spoken

the searing pain within her soul
grows with each fight
fought

the voices of hers screaming in her head
struggle to be stronger with each word
said

The path she is forced to travel on
will tear her apart with each step
taken

Author notes

there is so much more i wanted to say but it will have to wait for another poem. i tried to keep the pattern.

what does it mean to you? how do you take it? How can i make it better? is there enough information? too much?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Miss Macabre
    June 15

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    Wow.

    The way you wrote, with the one word in place of a third line, was like a slap in the face. Abrupt and powerful.

  • Raven of Iniquity
    June 15

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    Hmm...

    It was very saddening... You kept the pattern fairly well and the flow was nice. Well done.

    ~Nova