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Amidst the bleating of mayhem's seat.

 

 

 

 

 

 

i strap leather sandals

to the sides

of soul's rolled-away stones

 

and free faith

from between my teeth,

whilst scars

scratch superiority

along my jaw

 

and i sing sketches

of follow me

and feel as my flock--

 

for my mind

is she almighty

and i

can find no use

 

for feet.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • aeolia
    July 15

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    yes

    "of soul's rolled-away stones"
    that was the only thing that irked me.


  • Exodus gold member
    July 13

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    There was a reason I asked you to enter the second one of these contests, and this is it. You write with an imagery that a lot of people only attempt, and do it amazingly well.

    Thank you
    F


  • February Moon gold member
    June 28
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    Amazing.


  • delightfulmess silver member
    June 25

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    oh this is a very thought provoking piece for me. You really are amazing. Always a pleasure to read your words.



    Delila


  • Teuc813
    June 16
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    intriguing lay out. good work.


  • amaranthine lover gold member
    June 16
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    Well, yeses all around then!


  • innocence jaded.xx
    June 16

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    Yes. Though short, I liked your original vocabulary and the images portrayed here. Though I do like longer freeverse poems, you have my vote.


  • adsaige
    June 16
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    Yes.

    Your diction and writing is very clear.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    June 16

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    Excellent

    'tis a most intriguing write, indeed. You have expressed your thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.


  • Uniquely-Scarred
    June 16
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    I CAN FIND NO USE FOR FEET, THIS FLOWS BEAUTFULY, I LOVED IT AS ALWAYS


  • Legion.As.One
    June 15

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    wow, this was a beautiful and fantastic piece. It doesn't rhyme but it flows along so elegantly.

    The last stanza,
    "for my mind
    is she almighty
    and i
    can find no use

    for feet."
    Is really chilling and it juts leaves me with a thoughtful, almost lost feeling. I can't really explain! But you did a good job on this, well done

  • SoulWhispher
    June 15
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    Most thoughtfull poem, well done as always, blessings with love Jon

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