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smiles and makeup cover up so much these days

 

She conceals evidence that requires more than a jury to judge. Her honey lips and honest heart are no longer spoken for. It's not like she demanded vacancy in the spring rain, she just wished you'd have been her umbrella. And out came the scars, like an abundance of stars, gazing on her frame. She was wilting and all she could do was paint. She liked to be blue.

 

His passion for hourglass damsels such as herself awakened a sleeping giant that all desire to be buried still. When he spoke to her, his breath bruised her. After all, he spoke with his hands. Even when he wanted to love her, there was quite a disconnect.

 

The beautiful people, screaming for someone to save them, that they may reach down and lift them out of the pit. Her eyes told so many stories, both beautiful and also broken. She etched new reasons to awake each day on the blank walls. 

 

"Is there a color I can find that will hide the reason I am dying inside?"

 

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Pic Credit: http://raminaribcage.deviantart.com/art/Make-Me-Up-72053322

AP Name: l o w e r c a s e p r e l u d e

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  • Jazzlyn
    August 6
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    very good write


  • trekkergirl
    July 14

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    Excellent I loved the way that you ended this. Great job. Your flow... your imagery... your word usage is wonderful. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into this contest.


  • laurel
    July 4

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    She was wilting and all she could do was paint. She liked to be blue.
    ^
    loved that.
    good write=)

  • Words cannot express, hence

    <3

  • i love this.
    and i love the picture too.
    you are a brilliant writer.


  • whiterabbit.
    June 28

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    This is amazing and so sad. I can really feel the emotions here and you've written them out so well. You have so much talent.
    The ending is just perfect and heartbreaking.

  • Born Gorgeous Reading List ~

    What colours! Mesmerizing and beautiful - I love the message and strength in this mate


    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    June 25

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    whoa! that was some writing poet!
    that last line was stop-dead-in-your-tracks
    beautiful and impact!

    way to write!
    ears/Seattle

    p.s .I love make up...however I do not use so much
    that it covers me up inside!


  • Rose Angel gold member
    June 24

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    So brilliantly penned..Portrayals of a wounded woman needing confidence and self esteem..You have such insight, and such a compassionate heart..All the best in the contest, C..

  • Wow, this is an amazing poem. It touches the heart, the soul, makes you question everything you know. (Or at least that's what it did to me, made me question myself)

    Your poem tells a story, a tragic story that is a reality for too many people. Unfortunately make-up is not the only way that people hide their pain. I know that all too well.

    Excellent work as usual.

  • arnal
    June 22

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    I see someone needing to mask the hurt, interesting write, some good work going on here, keep it up,enjoyed


  • Enrinye
    June 18

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    This is a tremendous write! very well written with great imagery and perfect flowing...it also touched me, especially these lines:

    ''When he spoke to her, his breath bruised her. After all, he spoke with his hands. Even when he wanted to love her, there was quite a disconnect.''

    wow, fantastically expressed, very poetic

    good luck in the contests
    take care
    Suza

  • Absolutly fantastic imagery here. I mean it, the last line was killer. I know so many people who wear so much cover up just to hide, unlike myself I'm a master ninja and can hide without make up that stuff is disgusting haha but your work astounds me. I'm even bookmarking this one for future reading. A great piece. I feel it should have a trophy
    Laura.

    • Well thank you, I am honored that you like this so much
      And you are an amazing writer as well. Your stuff is brilliant.

  • Blown away, yet again. This one holds so much emotion and is such a great reminder to those that are being beaten. It also gives a way to look into the eyes of the hurt and the damned, instead of over-looking it. Your imagery is so great. "She liked to be blue" that stuck out to me the most, for some reason. I really liked this piece, metaphors, imagery, just amazing. Great job with this ! Keep writing !

    Josh

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