You are the falling rain;
embodiment of life’s essence.
Ever showering me with your affection.
Without you I would perish.
You are the calming breeze
that gently brushes across my face
when I am wrought with anguish.
Without you my tears would never dissipate.
You are the volcano
that fuels the passion within;
blessing me with Aphrodite’s grace.
Without you my heart would grow cold.
You are the foundation
that provides a base for my aspirations;
the bedrock upon which I stand.
Without you I would fall.
You are the moonlit sky;
my beacon in the night.
Without you I would never dream.
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Wow~
I'm Happy to see Your quill dance Warren
Wahooooooooooo~ You bring the Beauty out in any word
The last line- swells the eyes~
Bravo!
Hope You are having a Fantastic Saturday too
Very Refreshing read my Friend!!
Thank You for sharing Your Heart
Best wishes in all You do
with love & light~ Desire~*~
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this is a beautiful peom i loved the line;
"blessing me with Aphrodite’s grace.
Without you my heart would grow cold"
beautifully written, very well done x
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good!
I like how you use the natural elements as metaphors (or similes) to describe the different emotions of your love. I like how "passion" is described in what my be destructive terms. Good job.
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Great Write!
This is a great write and capturing from the very first line. All the verses and messages are clear for me. The last verse, however, has only 3 lines and the others have 4 lines...the rhythm changes here somewhat....just an observation! Write On!
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Good
Well said with heart felt emotions that rose from your words and lodged themselves in the readers heart and soul. The love, respect and friendship your hold in your heart is evident within the heart of your message of love. It is well written with powerful imagery that liberate their presents from the page and enter our minds with ease of skill.
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I really think this is tight, very well put together. Beautiful, romantic and full of love. The only thing that kinda bothered me was the last line... since i would think that "without you", the person would do nothing except dream of the of them. hmmm, just my take on it.
Enjoyed the write, nicely done
~ wendy
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OK, HOLY SH*T
THAT WAS:<> THAT WAS... WORDS CAN'T DISCRIBE HOW... HOW AAAMMMAAAZZZIIINNNGGG (amazing) THAT WAS.
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