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Not So Far




Clouds of wishfulness
crowd the crescent moon's glow,
dimming earthbound light;
darkened ocean laps the shore
haphazardly as dreamers stroll
casually unaware of any urgency.

Casting wishes to stars in hiding
behind the looming clouds,
dreamers muse on someday,
mythical someday,
when their dreams come true.

Deep rumblings overhead
send the dreamers scurrying
toward the distant park pavilion,
the safety of its stone walls.
As rains sweeps down, lightning
strikes spectacularly, splitting
a small tree in two, decisively.

Windswept clouds lose their forms
and density as gray light brightens
to lavender, then golden pink,
rays enhancing the forlorn tree,
no longer strong and growing.

As rising sun illuminates
the dreamers see more clearly.
Their someday lies not far away
but within the power of their making.


Someday is today.


Ms. Marvel




Author notes

I had so many problems setting up Ms. Marvel's page,
that I thought I'd best park this here. Then, voila,

one more time and it worked!

And then the loaded page diappeared, but
a clever admin fixed it!
http://allpoetry.com/Ms.+Marvel

8/10/09 gone again, Ms. Marvel2000, and this time in the day.
Will miracles begin!

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  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 17

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    this is so very well done. i really like how the second stanza sets up the balance of the poem (at least for this reader) generating a sort of energy and quest. plus, the beautiful illustrations as always.

    nicely written.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      September 17
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      Ah, yes--the dreaming beigns there!
      I had created an alter ego, Ms. Marvel2000
      to enter this in the Someday contest,
      but it kept disappearing, so I brought it
      here as well! Now Ms. Marvel2000 appears
      to be stable!!! She is a character created'
      for our interactive Mystery Whodunnit.

      Thank you for your kind coments!

      M-C

  • I thought i had already commented on this, and see now that i did. but this was a delight to the senses, easy to imagine with a wonderfully captured mood. Love the mood of the beginning and the description of the last half. Enjoyed.... again.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 18
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      You are welcome to visit again.
      I should have paid better attention
      for I just found an extra space in the copy
      to remove!!!

      Thank you so much for detailing
      the elements you enjoyed.

      M-C


  • deercatcher
    August 9

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    This feels so much like My Lachrymal. Short version here, long at Parenchma. I take care of trees; and cut a lot of lightning destroyed ones. They sometimes fall apart in firewood. I am quite frightened by lightning, being intimately aware of what it can do. I am going to venture a guess; your favorite color is turquoise?

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 10
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      Ah, you are observant--noting turquoise everywhere.

      I see the comparison---and now I have read both versions,
      impressive as they both are!

      Your respect is well noted in the tone of your work.
      Thank you for sharing the info.

      M -C

  • Unfortunate that storms or tragedies are necessary to prompt action, to create urgency...but for most of us this is so. This is an important discussion of what many could learn an easier way. I will credit your players here for at least having the courage to dream, if not to execute.

    Lovely writing.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      July 10

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      Thank you, ten.
      Seems we need to dream in order to execute.
      Yes, urgency of sorts is a great motivator!

      M-C


  • angelica silver member
    June 20

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    M-C I saw the Ms Marvel page come through to add as a fave but it has disappeared and I can't find it anywhere.
    This is lovely, the words really come alive. I sounds like the weather we've been having here, overcast and wet and we rejoice when the winter sun shows itself, only to disappear again causing depressive thoughts.
    Lovely.
    angelica

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 21
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      Oh, I will send you heat---my AC not up to speed,
      worked fine when it was temperate outside with cool nights,
      but the heat ha finally come, 78 in here, not the 70 I need.
      Awaiting a service call!

      I sent al link to Ms. Marvel in a message.
      The page went down but came up again,
      on the second day. I knew all along I can
      only be one person!!!

      I shall send you sunny thoughts every day
      during your overcast and wet season.
      Better yet, every day, no matter the season

      Did you notice I adapted the sweetest angel
      graphic to use on this piece---it had just
      the feeling I wanted to convey.

      Love and hugs,

      M-C


  • Yemassee gold member
    June 15
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    Ok, so this is on Ms. Marvel's page. I was all messed up because I saw this poem there earlier, lol

    So basically hopes evaporate filling dream clouds and then just like rain, fall from the sky at propitious movements. Ok, I added a tad to it, but that's a wonderful notion.

    Toss in night becoming day and what a great idea, these symbols of burgeoning hope. And just as all the water that was here at the beginning of time is still on the earth, so is hope (if we run with that premise.)

    But there is a little more...this hope nourishes so that hope must be found, not just simply received:

    "As rising sun illuminates
    the dreamers see more clearly."


    And it carries the theme I believe you and I discussed recently of tomorrows being today. Or maybe it was Joy, it was someone, lol

    And yeah, I'm arrogantly pleased that I'm apparently the only one that sees any of this!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 16
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      Ah, Orson so becomes you,
      seeing the visions in the black and white,
      delving deeper, understanding the inferences.

      Welles may be your best Yem-alike avatar yet,
      the visionary, the one who truly sees and expresses
      opinions, strong, insightful postions on what he perceives.

      And then there is the reference to being "arrogantly pleased"--
      both Wellesian and Yemish, knowing one is so right,
      a true discoverer, a revealer---a condition
      with which one should be rightly
      pleased and satisfied!

      "So basically hopes evaporate filling dream clouds and then just like rain, fall from the sky at propitious movements. Ok, I added a tad to it, but that's a wonderful notion." (Yem) You read the words, the mind, see all the illusions that
      want to be there. With my propensity toward multi-part stories, I hoped
      I could convey much in few words here---and you did run with the rain,
      perceptively!

      "But there is a little more...this hope nourishes so that hope must be found, not just simply received..." (Yem) Ah, yes, not a passive activity, but one of
      searching---as is the concept of "someday" being today, but for the looking---
      that today could fill the roll of that fulfilling someday, if one opens eyes
      to it.

      Ah. the Citizen Kane avatar, so fitting---Yem, always memorable!

      Setting up the Ms.Marvel page, with all the "error" pages coming at
      me caused me to post this here---and then, not used to giving up,
      I just started the account set-up all over again---and it worked!!

      Thank you for the insight and the sharing!

      M-C



      • Yemassee gold member
        June 16
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        Wow, not just for the kind words but the understanding of my words, thanks!

        I'll copy and paste to Ms. M but will edit where needed to keep a level of anonymity so if you choose to have that, it won't be my fault if you don't.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          June 16
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          No concerns about the anonymity---I posted
          the Aestherte2000 link there. But of course
          it doesn't "click." That page confounds me!

          You deserve even more kind words than that!!!

          • Yemassee gold member
            June 16
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            The last AP page I created Sandy74 was quite messed up when she was gold. Everything took time to show up. If I added an image or created a link it took a couple hours to actually show the image, or any change I might make. Maybe that is Marvel's problem too. Even when the gold went away those problems remain, still do, I couldn't be bothered to complain about it, lol

            If that isn't your problem open the advanced editor, type the word you want to use then highlight it, click on the little chain thingie and then add the link you want it to go to. That should work. It's pretty basic. I think that's how I used to do it.

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              June 16
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              Well, if the Master had problems, too,
              then I don't feel so bad.

              Saw your comment on C-J's, er S-N's new piece---
              I had just asked her if she had ever seen that piece
              of yours, for the feelngs created were of that same
              wonder.

              • Yemassee gold member
                June 16
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                You actually remember that? It was in a contest by Mariza, as usual, it didn't win, lol I think I wrote about 7 for that contest, I'm almost sure none of them won...I could have written 600...none would have won... lol

                C-N's ended up more about wonder and hope, mine was more about the dread and finding a purpose in an existence without meaning...yes, more Mr. Happy, lol

                • Aesthete2000 gold member
                  June 16
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                  You don't remember the tiitle, either, do you?
                  I remember the contest was "curtains."
                  Oh, another one, hanging the living room curtains,
                  I think that was before the other, which gave me
                  a bit of apprehension, the curtains imparting a
                  somewhat claustrophobic feeing to me.

                  • Yemassee gold member
                    June 16

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                    Remember the title? No I don't. I used to have a micro fiction list on Yem but never added one on Yem, that would help.

                    I could find it. It's somewhere in that list of 300 or so stories. I doubt it's in a Yem's dozen.I have a website I created elsewhere with about 160 of my stories, I could probably find it quicker there.

                    Ah hanging the curtains, in one they ended up making a tent, the husband and wife. Why am I so moral and my characters have to be married before they fool around? lol

                    Another, which I liked had a boy and their sister (Bubbles and Egbert) re-inacting a war scene in their parents livingroom.

                    • Aesthete2000 gold member
                      June 16
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                      Oh, Oh, Oh---the battle in the living room! Right!
                      What about on Mariza's page---does she have a list of contests? I know her page is minimal---but perhaps
                      it's hidden. I rmember coming across the curtains
                      again about a month ago---but I was just poking around in the lists.

                      all those gems, hiding away...

                      • Yemassee gold member
                        June 16
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                        If I'd left them in the contests that would be a good idea.

                        It's possible the curtain to a curtian, one still exists, maybe on Horse-Shoe.


  • Denerica
    June 15

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    Wow, the imagery you always project, I loved the description, I love storms, so you place the reader in a dreamscape...Awesome dear friend. Blessings.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      Hi, Denise!

      Ah, your vivid imagination
      takes you to the dreamscape.
      Thank you for slipping into
      the experience!

      M-C

  • Glorious colors ...

    and interesting thoughts for 'your' poetical presentation ... joy


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      Colors--perhaps rivalling
      your Florida cloudscapes!

      Glad the words and images
      caught your eye!

      M-C


  • arafura gold member
    June 15
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    Great work (as usual!). You too are a marvel, poet!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      Hi, John.

      Your words are so psychic, so prophetic,
      as I posted this piece as Ms. Marvel
      on a new site, but it kept "erroring"
      me off, so I placed it here first!!!

      Thank you!

      M-C


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    June 15

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    excellent~

    Beautiful sis
    Felt as if were there as we are having a lil storm here now............
    This should be in a contest..it would be a winner
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      Thank you, so much, dear Susan.

      Actually, it is posted in Yem and Pixie's
      "Someday" contest under Ms. Marvel.
      I had difficulties in the set-up of the
      account, so I posted it here, so as
      not to be lost. And then, after
      re-applying, I got the Ms. Marvel
      site to cooperate!

      Hope your storm passed safely
      and left green grass in its wake.

      Take care,

      M-C


  • gaze
    June 15

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    Ah, this is the second poem I read where the crescent moon is present
    A lovely gathering of beautiful imageries here


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      That ever-present, haunting moon.
      It has us in its spell, does it not, gaze?

      Thank you, moon-girl!

      M-C

  • This is a very interesting poem

    (By the way, one of your blue and purple butterflies follows me everywhere I have pinned it onto my pocketbook )

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      http://allpoetry.com/poem/3904803
      And here is one of the aformentioned
      butterflies, along with more of its
      cousins.

      M-C

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      June 15
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      Oh, what a joy for my art to be on the trail
      with Olivia in colorful Florida. Yay!

      Thank you for letting me know. I should
      go to the page that its photo rests upon
      and update its whereabouts!!!

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